| Reviews for Blue |
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InkWeaverabc 6/8/13 . chapter 1Hey! In the main, lovely story - i adore your charactisation of tonks, and the descriptions are very nice. Your prose is simple but at the same time it sometimes - right at the end, for example - seems almost poetic. Well done with that :) About the only thing i didn't really enjoy was sirius' and lupin's joking around at the beiginning. Its not that i object to it on principle (I do, but if that was the problem I would leave it; it doesn't relate to your fic) its just that it really doesnt seem in character for lupin. Hes always portrayed as more mature than the other mauraders and while this seems like sirius i just dont think remus would go along with it like that, especially not in front of tonks. Other than that, however, this was a lovely story, withjust the right mix of sweetness and poignancy. Well done :) |
Harriate Slate-Res-Hari-Agnew 4/11/11 . chapter 1You mentioned Diggle! |
NeverthelessTwin 2/12/11 . chapter 1Ok, I've read this story and I'm more or less over my previous very dramatic review sorry 'bout that. I read a bit of your profile we have similarities, my parents were 18 years apart in age. |
Louey06 2/5/11 . chapter 1very nice story i liked their conversation emensly! |
JazzyLittleMonster 1/18/11 . chapter 1oooh this is lovely with such a tinge of sadness. but man do i want a foot rub from remus ;) |
galindaby 5/25/10 . chapter 1Tonks/Remus fics are never a bad thing :) I think the language is really good and I like the way you described them :) So keep going with the two of them |
Iris 2/25/10 . chapter 1 I love Pink and I love this. You have the most beautiful writing style. I would ADORE more Tonks/Remus stories out of you; you certainly have a way with them. 3 |
Old Fiat 10/9/09 . chapter 1You should TOTALLY write more Tonks/Remus stuff. This was really fantastic. I mean, for one reason or another, I always imagined him with brownish-hazely eyes, but this... this totally justified the blue-eyes idea. Not that it needed much justifying... Yeah... So, I'm rambling. I freaking LOVED this. It was AWESOME. I loved the description of his eyes being the same color as 'mold on cheese'. It worked so well. Like, how even when you really like someone, you can still call their nose a 'schnoz' (granted, you didn't say this in the story, but anyway) and say their eyes are the same color as moldy cheese. It was really realistic. I also liked the way that Tonks acted, how she had this kind of chip on her shoulder (but of course, it's got to be a lot smaller than Sirius') and how she wanted Remus to like her for who she was, but still didn't want to seem immature or way too clumsy around him. I like the description of her socks, for some reason. I don't know why, but I picture them as, like, those really heavy wooly ones that are, like, an inch thick and... yeah. Well, you know what I mean. At least, I hope you do. XD Let's see... I have about 8800 characters left. Let's see how long I can make this go, eh? The assortment of adverbs attached to the color of Remus' eyes was great. Stuff like 'cataclysmically' and ... yeah... Well, I can't find the other ones right now, but you have no idea how much I ADORE it when people use words like that. Like, very few people do now on FFN or in, like, actually published books. I love words like that, especially when they're just dropped in the way you used them in this. Fantastic! Another thing I thought was great was this one part... let's see... Here, when she's talking about her hair: "It was the same, piercing blue, but it lost all of its magic when it wasn’t hidden behind his dark brown lashes and staring at her intensely." Fabulous! I loved this. How, it's like, no blue can be as perfect as the one in his eyes. Really, really great stuff right there. Just over 7950 characters... lol. But no, seriously, I could go on about this all day. I loved the way you wrote Sirius. How he keeps making those gross guy jokes and then gets all "Oh crap! I forgot there's a girl here!". XD Brilliant. I also liked when he goes, "You fancy him!" the moment Remus leaves the room. Reminds me of a friend of mine. Good stuff. :D Anyway, so I really could talk about this forever, but I think I should go to bed. Please, PLEASE write more Tonks/Remus stuff because this was FAN-freaking-TASTIC. Toodles! -Old Fiat (s. Italy) |
klutzygal12 8/22/09 . chapter 1aw i cry everytime i read a tonks/lupin story cuz i kno their gonna die :..0..( |
singing4ever11 5/7/09 . chapter 1wait WOAH. you can't stop there! please continue, im begging you. *sigh* i am half in love with lupin. dont judge me.] |
daphne 13 2/3/09 . chapter 1WOW! you should update soon! i loved it! i think it captured tonks characted very, very well! ;) and please , please, please update soon! |
Artisticmom2 2/3/09 . chapter 1Nice story. Thought the "verbal dancing" was amusing! Write more! |
harumscarum 1/5/09 . chapter 1This was bloddy fantastic, you captured the characters really well! I hope you write heaps more remus/tonks stories, or any stories with sirius in them, or any hp stories for that matter coz you did a great job |
Mystic Wolf Girl 1/5/09 . chapter 1 Uh-oh. Uh-oh. Bad Tonks & Lupin. But... Sirius is far from senile! And even if he does act odd from time to time, come on! You can't blame him. Anyway, good fanfic. |
BrokenFaerie16 1/5/09 . chapter 1Oh I love! Please write more Remus/Tonks stories, it was so good! Kinda bittersweet in the end - would like to see a few that had more sweetness, but I loved this as well. Always thought Tonks and Remus were good together. This made me laugh so much, Sirus was great :) and I really liked that you showed Lupin having fun as well. Too many people like to torture him, its all "woe is me" which is fine, but this made a welcome change. Please write more! |