I love this. Like... so much. So subtle and beautifully written and ahdkjghsdg. Brava :)

Hm, that was... unusual. I liked it - very in character and canonical. It would be great if you decided to continue writing in this fandom.

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I love this, you write so amazingly. It's very interesting and I'm very sad you wish to keep it as a one-shot, because I greedily want more. XD I hope that one day you find it okay to elaborate on this, maybe as an alternate universe? I dunno, I can just hope and dream and keep re-reading your wonderful stories~

Dang it. I ended up really liking this one and I'm kicking it's a one-shot. XD It's very well written and intriging, leaving me hanging on every word until the very end- where I cursed there isn't any more. I hope you one day deside to elaborate on this or do a spin off. I just adore your work~

I love this idea! Please expand upon it soon!

Aw that was actually really cool and sweet.. but kind of sad too. I liked it alot~ You should write more.. I just think human and computer/robot stuff is always really cool xD

I always like it when people do stuff like this. It's such a great idea to toy around with. It's a little hard to fit it into the story line like you did, so the brownie points are just really pouring in, from my point of view. The way that Dave has to keep reminding himself, and how HAL's insecurity acts like such a virus all seems to tie in very well to the initial plan. How HAL stumbled over his words and got so focsude on Dave... I especially liked the bit where Dave got flustered over HAL's constant surveillance. More than one mind was going over the possibilities.

But, I have to say, my favourite bit was when Dave drew that simple pciture of HAL. It just seemed like such a sensual prelude to the actual goings-on in the story. I thought it was very well done, altogether, and though I doubt many people will search under this area, I'm confident that whoever does see it will spread the word.

Plus, your style's good. I was hooked whenever you wrote something about 'Le Fantôme de l'Opéra'. Raoul's reactions to Erik-especially in 'Past Times'-just sent my imagination blazing.

This was better than I expected, which shouldn't surprise me because I enjoy all your stories.
I'll admit that the though of Dave/Hal had me half 'Ew' and half laughing, but you did it quite realistically. It explains, possibly, why everything happened as it did.
I actually felt a wee bit sorry for Hal, even if he is 'just a computer'.