This is a wonderful piece so far. I like the way you've made Nalbina come to life; details like the texture of darkness, and the difference between city-dark and true-dark are very compelling. here. I'm looking forward to future chapters.

Another great chapter! I don't usually read stories without romance but your story caught my attention.

I love your history about the Ronsenburg brothers. A lot of people's interpretation is Noah being the prankster of the two. This chapter is tragic because of Basch maybe kind of regretful and the whole situation is really getting him, and Noah giving himself to the empire because of his hate.

Anyways I babbled a lot huh?
I hope that you will update soon.
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Great Chapter.

I like how you showed a lot of the cruelty of Archadia (poor Basch). I also like how you showed more of Vayne's character especially his evilness, but I'm kind of confused by Vayne's statement 'The gambit has not finished playing out.' I never understood Basch's purpose of being alive in Nalbina (even in the game). I guess I'm not looking into it really deeply.

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Great chapter!

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Nice start!

Love your interpretation of Basch's character especially how his mind work when he was at Nalbina.

Well written

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Poor Basch, but I love your story!

Please more chapters!!

This is beautiful. The vocabulary is smooth, the pacing is a dream, and HAMLET at the top. It made me swoon. Finally, decent fanfiction. You have my infinite gratitude.

whoa this is so badass.

but i have to say, nothing's worse than puking on closed space. ... but I laughed out loud when Basch "apologized" spitefully nonetheless.

The descriptions were awesome. I'll never look at that nalbina scene or even the magic's effects the same way again. Whoohoo.

Anyway. VAYNE IS SO DEMENTED! I LOVE IT. And I love the part where the two of them finally talked. I suppose there are now more things to look forward to on the next chapter!

I rather liked that chapter. It was very gut wrenching with your vivid description of action and the pain Basch endures. You make Vayne's cruelty shine as well, how nice he acts but what a snake he is.
It's great.
Basch's last words before the end of chapter were all too in character as well.
I'm curious to see more.
Good luck, and yeah you finally updated! Woo!

*insert big, huge grin*
Me likey! Me likey! X-D

Well done, well done indeed!

You had me at the first sentence of the first chapter, and you continue to hold me in thrall. It's a rare thing indeed to hold my attentions for very long, and you have done that admirably.

This chapter was very bloody, and very brutal, and yet...I could not stop reading. It's funny: I know how the story plays out (and ends) for the good General and his rag-tag group, but I am impressed by your re-telling of it.

Looking forward to the next chapter. Toodles!

honestly, i expected something like a hojo/vincent valentine = vayne/basch thing going on in this fic, but i guess I was wrong. haha

But nonetheless, it was still a very good fic. It was moving to say the least. I liked the descriptions and i especially like the conversation between Basch and Vayne. this is really cool.

Okay. I'm putting this bad-boy in my Hall of Excellence C2, Angst-tastic: Words That Hurt. Your story is not listed as angst, but it has the one element that would qualify it for my C2--excellence.

Again, your imagery is impeccable. I am thoroughly enjoying your tale. Please continue.

Hoo-wee. You have a talent for turning a phrase. Your imagery is incredible. This is good stuff. Off to read Chapter Two!

This is a very powerful and driven piece with wonderful imagery. I shall keep an eye open for more. Good job.

~*lunaschild*~