This was adorable, beyond adorable actually. All I've done the past several hours is simply read your Narnia stories and I must say I'm in love. The relationship you capture between Edmund and Peter is fantastic. I love you work.

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BLOODY BRILLIANT!

I love the plot. It's very cute. The display of affection that Peter showers Edmund is imply intoxicating (in its adorable-ness). Lovely, lovely, lovely -though I have never pegged Edmund down to draw.

Writing style flows well. Keep writing!

Thanks.

*sniff* that was great! I would so much like to see his sketching =)

good idea, besides!

HQJ

Wow. This story is amazing. You do a fine job detailing emotions, such a hard thing to capture. And the vocabulary you use is exquisite. It's elegant and flowing, yet it is not too advanced for it to seem out of character for the boys. Very well done. I can't wait to read the rest of you writings.

Aww soo adorable! Edmund with his friends was classic and the boys banter in the hallway was adorable as well. Excellent!

LOVELY! I absolutely loved this fic! The more I read Edmund/Peter brotherfics (particularly yours), the more I itch to write one of my own. I enjoyed the way you lead the reader down the path of the story, the same way Peter dances Edmund back to their dorm (and yes, Peter's request to dance and Edmund's "No.", "No!","NO!" reaction was totally authentic! I giggled like crazy through that entire bit!).
I also appreciated the concern the boys have for one another... Edmund's concern for Peter's welfare, Peter's concern for Edmund's emotions, their shared concern for their relationship. Not to mention the tension created by the possibility of Peter going off to war. The moment of Peter's revelation and Edmund's reaction to it is a beautiful release for both the characters and the reader (and, I suspect, for you the writer!).
I really have no suggestions to make! I was a little confused by the reference to Dover Beach,since I have not read it, but now you have me curious! Think I'll look it up :)
Bravo! Please keep it up!

I... don't think I read this one!! How did I miss one of YOUR stories?! How very odd, it was highlighted like I had read it but I honestly don't remember reading it. Hope I'm not double reviewing you. Anyway, wonderful story! Simply brilliant. Definitely glad you wrote it. I hope you write more soon! Still waiting (as patiently as possible) for those who speak. (LOVE that story!)
Thanks for writing.
Wildfire

Well done - i loved this. I liked this one better than the other one - the one with the letter, because it was more cheerful and bouncy and involved Peter forcing ed to dance down the hallway with him. Heh, i did like that bit. ;P

Great work on this - it flowed really well. i liked the idea of the courtyard, and how anyone could find one or both of the Pevensies there at almost any time.

And it was in past tense, which made it so much easier to read than the last one! Past tense just flowes so much better - most stories are told and heard in past tense, so its just easier because thats what most people are used to.

The mental image i got when you described the picture was really sweet too. :)

Love bundi

What splendidly brotherly love--yes, Peter wants to be a hero, and right now the War is what they've got. And yet...he's willing to give that up for Ed's sake after _seeing_ how much it really means to him. Very good.

This was an incredibly heartwarming story between two brothers and a pleasure to read.

Peter got Edmund to /dance/ down the hall?! *dies laughing* I would have loved to see that! lol.

This was great... Beautifully written. I absolutely love how you express the boys' relationship. And I loved how Edmund drew the two of them! So cute. And it kept Peter from going to war. :D

I'm going to go read more of your stories now! *skips off happily*

You always write so beautifully. I adore your Peter/Edmund brothery bonding fics! I'm looking forward to the next.

You did it again! I have wet eyes for the second time in ten minutes! How very lovely, and so very Edmund at the end. All through it, really. I loved the idea of Peter inheriting Lucy's pout.

That was... just breathtaking. I couldn't tear myself away, I couldn't stop the tears, my goodness it was so powerful. Thank you for such a wonderful read!

God Bless, Fabs x