Wow - that was really sad, but very well done.

This was very good. When you said character death, I immediately assumed Trini was getting ready for a funeral with a black dress (because you never mentioned the color). Seeing the lyrics at the end changes my review a little.

I wanted to say this was all amazing, I absoluely loved how you made everything so original and descriptive and lovely. I loved how you were able to describe everything so neutrally that (if you hadn't mentioned the death) the reader would have assumed it was a wedding, yet the description also fits that as a funeral. It would have been interesting if you provided some reflection on that, how it can be basically the same with two notable differences: the color of the woman's dress and the absence or presence of the groom.

However, when you got to the part of the gun salute, I don't know how to say this, but it seemed to fall from its previous excellence. I instantly heard the song you referenced in the end, and that is all I could think about. From that point on it seemed too similar to the song, as if you got stuck and were essentionally paraphrasing the lyrics. Now, I haven't heard the song for a year but my sister would play it almost daily for a year on our way to school. This was such a wonderful and original sounding piece that it disappointed me that it fell back to the song. I especially loved the bit about Jason's mom coming to sit with her. That really tied in to the dislike you mentioned earlier.

I still absolutely love this, I want you to know that. I will definitely favorite. It was hauntingly beautiful and sad; you have a great gift for detail. Just those last couple of paragraphs weren't quite up to par from the rest of the story. I also loved the reflections you added in and how well you transitioned from the present to the past. Beautifully done.

I like writing stories based off songs, or inspired by them, and sometimes it works if you almost paraphrase some songs for certain stories. My only problem was that you didn't really do so until the end. All in all, tragically beautiful, a masterpiece.

I hope you understand I truly loved this (which is why I spent the time giving you such a lengthy review. If I thought this was crap I wouldn't have bothered to say anything). I hope to see many more amazing stories from you! You defintely deserve more reviews than this.

p.s. be careful with the lyrics! I've had my stories removed because I had them in the story.

You had me thinking it was going to be a wedding first. Good job and a very sad story.

Wow, this was sad. You had me going. I really thought it was a wedding. You sly, illusive girl.

Really sad turn. And I like how you made the death something the cause outside of being one of the Rangers. I liked it. (If you're supposed to like this kind of stuff).

Mary

This is so sad! Poor Trini! Is there going to be a sequel?