   layla-xd
2009-03-11 . chapter 1Heyo =)
Hm, I actually wanted to review your drabbles... but somehow I came to read this songfic. Must be fate.
Anyway, it´s the same as with the drabbles: I don´t read many songfics...
... but this one was really good. I don´t know how you do it but you always accomplish it to characterise Yohji and Aya in such a good way that I can understand them, feel with them.
I liked the thing with the changing POV´s - even the "odd present-tense-ish third-person-narrator"^^
But especially the Yohji part and the Aya part were so good! I think you really managed it to show how differently they think, how different they are - and though they are attracted to each other, they mean so much to each other (and make a good couple, of course^^).
And the ending... I liked it so much! Sounded so hopefully... and it´s true, I think they can handle a relationship despite all the doubts and problems...
But the thing I definitely liked most was the following description of how Yohji got into Aya´s life and heart:
"like some twisted, over-affectionate, pleading glowworm"
That´s so cute! Now I´m imagining an image of a Yohji-glowworm... I so wish I could draw!
Ah one thing more: I didn´t know the song but I followed your advice and listened to it on youtube - it´s really great! And the lyrics and your fic fit perfectly!
(Once again I´m very sorry for my English, it´s so hard for me to express myself in English... and because of that the reviews always are way too long and kind of confusing, gomen ne...)
Bye,
Layla |
 kichikoneko
2009-01-21 . chapter 1I know it's stupid to be jealous of their relationship you described here, but it was beautiful to me the way it was written here, the darkness of it all, and the light. I guess I can only say "Great job" because my mind is so lost I cannot think of anything better. It's always the small fics that get to me... |
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