Wow amazing I love this, I wish this moment was in the movie I would have liked to watch this scene rather then watch Susan and Caspian kiss. wonderful

"all the joy and hope of a Narnian sunrise"

I loved that. Love the whole thing! Lovely! ^_^

Thanks very much for a beautiful story. I enjoyed it as I've enjoyed all your fic and the world of Narnia that you help re-create, but this one also touched me in real life, back here in the shadowlands. It's good to remember in the midst of the confusion of life, that that is when He makes the most sense. It reminded me of the Michael Card song "God's Own Fool"...where the second stanza says:

Surrender the hunger to say you must know
Have the courage to say: "I believe".
For the power of paradox opens your eyes,
and blinds those who say they can see.

The chorus explains that after all, He Himself led the way in this paradoxical thinking:

When we in our foolishness thought we were wise
He played the fool and He opened our eyes.
When we in our weakness believed we were strong,
He became helpless to show we were wrong

And so we follow God's own fool;
for only the foolish can tell:
Believe the unbelievable;
come be a fool as well.

Which is true in Narnia as well...Aslan becomes "weak" and "foolish", as Jadis tells him at the Stone Table...but as Peter knows, it's worth following the Great Fool.

PS: I case you're interested, the full lyrics are here at /card-michael-gods-own-fool-lyrics.html.

That was really good. Very thought provoking. You described the concept of faith really well (at least the way I have always thought about it) - believing in something without the need for it to make sense. Great job.

This really was lovely. Rarely do I see a good 'You're leaving' fic. (Tried one myself which was rather a disaster). Peter's frustration -- acceptance -- and eventual understanding was well done. 'I think I've found him' was almost chilling. I'm trying to imagine the moment one of the Pevensies gets it, and I think it would be like that: an admission to a sibling, which makes it real.

Your dialogue was good (so like a centaur!) as well as details: like Peter talking to his sword's pommel. The characters were good. Present tense was a dubious choice, but you pulled it off.

As an atheist the Christian themes were pretty strong, but there's really nothing wrong with that - after all, I think Lewis's position on this was pretty clear. I really enjoyed this; it was very well written and characterised. "Your small, son-of-Adam idea of sense" made me laugh. Very centaur-ish.

This is really lovely, JotM...I don't much care for the present tense telling, but that's only a little quibble. And I don't think the Christianity part of it was at all obvious; there is much room for interpretation. But using this setting to illustrate the Biblical principle of "when I am weak, then I am strong" is very clever and well-done. Chocolate chip cookies for you!

God bless! :-)