I like the story, but you need someone to proofread. It makes it harder to read and enjoy the story with all the typos. :-)

Good start. Proper grammar really helps with comprehension of the story. So many times, people will give Stephanie thoughts as opposed to actually words and it's confusing to decipher which is which without proper grammar. Not trying to be a broken record, or be a b*h, but the story will be a lot more enjoyable, readable, and understandable with proper grammar.

It was good for a first fic, I hope you are going to add to this. Though you might want to check your grammer and spelling, there were a couple of mistakes.

Amy

good job for your first. are you going to add to this? sue

This was cute. I would take advantage of a beta tho, to make a few corrections to some grammar and other issues. Great idea for a story! :)

why stop there? Keep going