aw... that's sweet, how they're all gathered for him:) I like that:)

This is a good tag. You have some very good ideas and you were able to get the characters voices well. However, there are a number or grammatical mistakes, i.e. missing words and misplaced punctuation. These really take the reader out of the story when you want the reader to be paying attention only to the meaning and action in your story. I'm sure if you or someone else were to read through the story just once, you would be able to polish it up. Again, you did an excellent episode tag, and it deserves to be polished.

Nice job. A very unique look at what is becoming a very popular episode in fanfiction. You did a great job of interweaving the aspects of the show into the story with very real results. Thanks for sharing.

I loved this...Great!

Very nice! I have never noticed your name before but I will be on the look out for your stories from now on. Wonderful story line. Thank you

I was waiting for some tags "Arrow of Time." Nice job. I really liked it. I liked the endning too, though I was hoping Don and Robin would talk some more.

"And though a parent is generated to bear a child, care for a child, teach a child, protect a child and love a child, there are cruel limits."

I really liked that line.

Nicely done.

I couldn't keep from smiling at Robin's "need" to hang on to Don.
I'm glad too he stopped by the Craftsman. It showed he understood his loved ones were worried and
by being thoughtful, he gave them a much more peaceful night.

I liked the scene, but you really need to have someone beta your stories. I thought at first that English was not your first language because of all the words you misused.

You have great ideas! Don't let your mistakes distract your readers from those ideas.

Jo

Interesting!

Nice ending!