I like this--a lot--but I have to say, this is /not/ a K+ fic XDX. Definitely T at the least. Too much psuedo-smexing for it to be PG.

Jesus Christ, girl, you just made my night/eve/day/whatever else, everytime I'll remember this it will make my day. It was FINALLY, after tons of other mostly pointless slash/yaoi ficlets, something different, with something I can't really describe but overpowering and damn, did I like the power it had over me.
And so I wanted to say a huge thanks for this oneshot.

Looking forward to new chap of FaS. :)

OMG this was the the best thing ever!! you are a great writer and I Hope that you can write more insane stuff like this! i LOVED it

Oh my goodness!
I'm not entirely sure whether that made me happy or sad.
Er, lets go with happy!
Though the doubt and confusion!
Oh such a terribly large amount of conflicting feelings!

i absolutely LOVED how this was written. it was so cute! i love your writing as much as i love this couple and thats saying something, trust me. keep up the good work. can't wait for the next chap. of FaS!!

Oh.
My.
God.

-squeals-
I love this!
Can't wait to see what else has been going on in that head of yours.

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There are no words.
Once again, I can't believe you could ever think of this as anything other than SUPERBONFANTASTIQUE. I loveloveloved it, as per usual. It was so rhythmic to read, with all the little pet names thrown in, and the evolution of thoughts was smooth and clear and wonderful.

As an actress, I'm looking at this like a monologue. And the way I can hear this voice playing in my head, all sickly sweet and thick with the sort of voice that expresses heavy thinking, UGH it's intoxicating. I love it. LOVE IT.

I don't know if my words are any encouragement to you, but I really hope they are. You're an inspiration, and I hope you find someone who means the same thing to you that you mean to me.
You're brilliant. Really.

Woah.

I... that was hotter than I was expecting.

Hah...

I liked all the endearments in this. Never really came across something like it, before.

But, on the next one like it (which I hope there is one, sometime, because it was actually very cute and sweet and fluffy and loving), might I suggest a beta?

I'm usually free. ;)

i know you said that this was just a one shot to get you back in the groove but shit i LOVED this. Genuinley thought it was fantastic... if this is you getting in the groove then god i cant wait to see whats coming next!

Aww, I loved this. :D It was so cute.
But I can understand how you think your writing it suffering. It was a little confusing, but I liked it that way. It made the story feel more real. n . n I liked it, no matter what you say.

I don't care what you say, I really liked this. It was different but it worked, really well might I add. I don't know what it was but actually... now that i'm thinking about it... it really worked. I dunno there's just something about it. Great job once again, i love how you make and describe these two interact (in all your stories) you really capture their personalities. The description of everything in this one was especially good :D

So, I know you said your writing is off or whatnot? But this was /absolutely/ //wonderful//. I think it's one of my favourite of your pieces, so far. Sure, there's a few typos, but this is just so touching, and real, and just, down-to-earth without being dull.

I think you did a gorgeous job writing when you're in a foul writing-mood. Hell, this would be superb even if you weren't in a slump.

I've missed you, I love you, welcome back!

God, where to begin.

Okay first off before I forget to say it One thing I've always loved is your use of italic to emphasise just the right word to make the sentence so much more weighted. You can almost hear the voice stressing the words. And in the case of the first, i went to call it a verse, paragraph, It makes the voice sound so condescending

I really see that voice as being a little devil on Kazu's shoulder, whispering in his ear.

Now that I think on it I have a hard time deciding whether it's animated or a song in my head. It reads wonderfully as a song. I imagine it to be kinda like Panic!'s with all that bitter sarcasm and hushed voices at times y'know?

But I can really see it animated too The very beginnign really stands out to me in that sense because it's just, the imagery is so wonderful. I think if we were watching the beginning of this it would be shot so the camera was showing their lega and I can imagine Kazu being backed into the table and possibly giving a tiny grunt, the table would probably move a bit and it would just draw you in to the story so much. 'What's going on here?' Because before you know it's Ikki having his way with Kazu it could be something entirely different.

The first few line he could be getting attacked or anything. And it might not even be Ikki. It's only as it moves on you realise he's being thoroughly molested But by who, because you haven't clarified that much yet

I feel kind of bad for Kazu that he didn't get a chance to enjoy his first kiss before realising it was already over. Lol I think Kazu would like *any* way Ikki took him. Purely because it's Ikki and he's his little lapdog.

I love that description 'rough and painfully accurate' cuz it makes me imagin Ikki being so forceful his fingers are catching and forcing little gasps from Kazu Also makes me curious as to where his fingers are roaming~
I just *love* how desperate the whole thing is. The visuals are just so tasty, and i can pratically hear the harsh breaths

"You and denial have always been on good terms" I love that line. Because thats just Kazu down to the ground, with his self worth issues and all that. Also Lol to Kazu unconsciously deciding he's the girl in the relationship, and worrying taht his boy is a 'womaniser' Well I guess his worries are somewhat well based what with Ikki's behaviour sometimes.

"After all, beautiful, you in-too-deep diluted child, you’re both green and clueless in the start of your teenage years" I really like that line. A very obvious reminder to just how young and naive Kazu can be. Because someone with Kazu's shyness and self esteem is not gonna have the experience that an extrovert like Ikki has.

God, when the voice starts to sew those seeds of doubt in Kazu's mind my heart wrenches for him. What if it's all just a way of release for Ikki and there are no feelings there where as for poor Kazu it means everythign to him. He doesn't want to admit it but even the concept of Ikki to do that most be crushing for him.
"When tomorrow comes, will you be able to meet his eyes, hunny? Will he be able to look at you, and with a look to prove to you that no, you aren’t just a thing to release sexual tension on, but a real, breathing, bleeding heart he’s fallen hard for"
That must be such a buzz kill for poor Kazu to be trying to enjoy the moment and then to have his traitorous mind filling with thoughts like that. God every passing second you'd be waiting for it to end.
I think if Ikki were to do that it would break Kazu into so many tiny pieces,

Okay so the image of Ikki hoisting Kazu's legs up is just to die for, his fingers gripping Kazu's thighs as he encourages him to wrap his legs around. One that begs to be drawn for sure. There are a lot of parts that are begging to be drawn but that's one of my faves.

"His tongue and the corner of your mouth are getting friendly, and there’s no more space between your stomachs. It’s not just you tugging anymore, darling, he’s got a pretty vicious grip on the small of your back now, yanking as if he can make you closer than touching." That just plain *has* to be drawn, No ifs, ands or...'duts' about it XD I just LOVE that imagery right there.
I also love that image of Kazu clinging to Ikki in a daze and his dreamy face unknowingly seducing Ikki. Its too...Kazu XD.

And I adore how eloquent you make him, he barely says 3 lines in the whole story 'Ahnn' Well done Kazu lol. I always love how you make reference to the moon in your stories I kind of associate it with Kazu now tbh.
"you’ll probably leave your beating heart in the front pocket of his jacket and he’ll leave you a customized necklace of dead skin cells" Another great line.

Only Ikki would ruin the mood by waving his hand in Kazu's face tho the thought of Kazu catching it and lowering it is very adorable.
So many wonderful pictures set up for me. A few bows and we'll be all set hmm?

I love the end bebe I know you said that you didn't like it and that you think it's the worst part. But I really think it concludes it so nices Reassuring all of Kazu's worries, that he's had thru the fic. The thought of Ikki mumbling sweet things for Kazu is just too precious.

And then we get to another wonderful picture Ikki sliding up Kazu's shirt. I know you love those kind of pictures so it's gotta be done. Not that I need much encouragement This laptop is shocking me again.

And the last little paragraph, it brings the story in a complete circle. Only this time instead of being slammed into the table Kazu's being lowered tenderly onto it. Another picture. And after taht it's left to our imagination what comes next~ Lucky for me I have a very vivid imagination haha.

God bebe tho The story is just so wonderful. I was so thrilled when I realised you'd finished it. I love this style of writing for you I know you say 'you just say you like everything' but i can't really deny it because I *do* but only because everythign that you do is amazing!
There are a few spellings here and there but nothign big.

There's probably a bunch of other things I wanted to draw attention to but I'll be sure to point them out when I reread it again. Because I will XD
Suffice to say I love it bebe. It kinda reminds me of when I first came across your stories The inspiration is still there and as soon as I read it i get all jittery and just want to draw so many things at once that i'm just confusing myself, and judging by how many times you've asked me if i'm alright it's obviously showing on my face

Guh I always just feel so proud of you when I read your stories. It's very rare that things inspire me the way that you do. And you're just so talented bebe. Love you.

Okay...I'm gonna end this thing Dx get to talking to you!

Honey Baby Darling, this was superb. I cant even begin to tell you how much this pulled me in. it was so inncoent and so sweet, like how and angel would tell the story. When i read it, i felt as though i was picking and tasting colors, something i never do, love, this is the best!

You didn't botch it. The style is a little different, but I like it a lot. But then again, I like slightly fractured styles.