There a bunch of mistakes in this which jar. You're using the wrong tense in the first sentence, 'Once, he attempted to give her the Gift of Life.' The second sentence has similar problems, 'She screams for him to stop and he does.' I think.

You've got little problems like that with tense all the way through, at least one in each paragraph and they detract from the story.

I didn't like the mention of a harem, because apart from anything else the general understanding of harem is a group of women belonging exclusively to one man. That doesn't work with Wraith, the sex ratio is scewed the other way, it would be impossible for a male Wraith to collect female Wraith, and if the harem are human then why should he listen to them anymore then to the human in his room?

That said I like the idea, partly I think because it's not exactly why it wouldn't work between a Wraith and a human. She grows old and dies, and as a creature that doesn't age he doesn't know what to do. He seems to care, although he shows it in anger and by trying to persuade himself again and again that she's just a soulless animal.

I think this needs checking through for tense and grammatical errors and possibly betaing. Otherwise it's a good fic.

You convey so much emotion - sadness, distain, disappointment - with so few words. Well done!

Gah!
I love this. I love the wraith in general because of their harsh and strong nature. I would very much enjoy seeing more one-shots with wraith in it. You inspired me to make an original character even. He's a lot like Warrior but has a fair few differences and no place in his life for any annoying female. Keep it up.
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*meep* O.O

That was...different. Would love to see more from you.

wow that was really touching (i think thats the right word)
loved it anyways.

that is beautiful in its sadness

thanks for sharing :)

That was just so sad! For the human ànd the wraith! Too bad he doesn't change his mind and it's a 'happy' ending lol.I do think they think they have to be tough and stuff and maybe see humans as weaklings cause they do show their emotions... That's very sad, if you ask me. :-(
Good story!(off course the whole thing with Althea is way better cause Lynex could act bad but never like this lol!)

Greetz: WRaith Fan -x-