Words can not describe how much i loved this story - I just wish it was longer.

I know this story was finished years ago but I can not stop wanting a sequel - I'm sure we all do.

10/10 for keeping me up for 3 days straight reading this =)

Oh snap - i just realised i havent even reviewed this once - forgive me for that iv been reading it for the past couple of hours =)

usually I do not like OC fanfics but this, by far, is on my top 5 list mate - an awesome job =D

Really liked the reference to Mirai Gohan of M Trunks' timeline in this chap - That is what a true hero should be like!

Amazing. Simply amazing.

I've actually read this before and a few weeks ago I decided to go ahead and dig up the GT episodes online and watch all of them.

After that I just had to come read this again.

I'm not too big on commenting on chapters. It takes away from that time I get to actually read the story.

You are a marvelous writer and I enjoyed this story in all of it's detail. This is one of those that your sad to see come to an end but are happy that it was completed.

Thank you for sharing this work with the world.

Speaking of afterlife, where is Goku now...?

THOSE ** BASTARDS ** OF A ** !

At last ! Goku is going to appear in the action !

I wonder if Goku is going to appear in this fic to train Roshi...?

... What ? There's a second planet that has Saiyans on it ? But weren't they killed four hundred years ago, and the last ones were on Earth ? It's so confusing...

Roshi, of course something great is going to happen ! Just wait...

So, with a title like that, what's a girl supposed to do except go 'ooh, what's Roshi done now?' I got the feeling when I first started reading this chapter that you are channeling a 'what proverbial blender can I put Roshi through today?'. That aside, however, I like this chapter because guys like Rock REALLY ought to get tossed around like a little more often, especially by a girl.

Oh and Gossip? I really wanna push her off a balcony. On TV, international broadcasted TV. She's perfectly characterised that way.

My only gripe with this chapter is that I got a little confused with journal-entries or actuality; I mean, I figure that it's all flashbacky-being-recordedness, but I think it could do with making it a little clearer, just to avoid confusion.

I know I say this about a lot of things, but this chapter makes me giggle, which can be taken in the wrong way I know. No, I do not usually giggle at trauma, but this chapter deserves a couple of giggles because of its slight 'twee' element. It's a good chapter to read right after all the highly provocative drama that we've been put through over the last couple of chapters. It gives us a chance to catch our breath.

I like that you made Ichigo a good cook, it makes me go 'yay! she's a girl!', and then having her throw that knife? Brilliantly cute. The normal discussion between her and Roshi that follows only adds to the whole dynamic of their relationship, I mean, we ALL know where it's going, but the touch of them at a dinner table having a relatively normal talk is very nice.

The Ode to Joy touch was sweet too.

Oh and yay for new dividers!

Squee. Utter utter squee. Admittedly, not much of a review but I loved your story, it was great and everything... and I liked the pace of your story. It had a start, middle and end... twists here, twists there... torturing of characters (as in mostly Goku and Kaio's)... building up to anticipation, lots of action, following through, highs and lows.

Utterly believable, considering everything's different, while remaining canon-ish. And you more or less created an entirely different "world" (different times and eras and all that). Lots of plot and character development apparent... um... yeah. Anyways, great story and I look forward to more of your fantastical writing (and style)

x3 Squee~!

I like how you've had this chapter open as though the previous lot really were a dream sequence. The denial factor is worked in nicely, and is totally understandable, best way to cope with things sometimes is to pretend they didn't happen. What's more, it makes for interesting storyline development!

Okies, I don't really have all that many issues with this chapter, apart from a couple of spelling typoes: "She had then CLAMED that she had been fired from ZTV because Capsule Corp." I think you're missin' an 'i' in there somewhere, sugar.

My other issue is this line:

"'Oh mother, if you only knew. My hands are not blood free either. You may blame Ichigo all you want, but had I not been knocked out, I would have been the one with those lives on my conscience. I have killed mother. If you knew that would you still see me as your little boy?'"

Woe be it for me to say that I don't like a good dose of dramatic dialogue every now and then, but this is more than an awkward mouthful. I'm assuming Roshi's trying to put some weight into the words, and justly so, but I think you could rework it a tad, make it slightly less wordy, putting it back into character, because as it is, I honestly can't see Roshi saying it properly.

Other than that...I really like Beth. She's perfect.

Okies, starting point! I is teh spelling witch!

Moron -> one R, not two: Roshi heard the words come out of Tee's mouth. 'Oh! That MORRON!'

"Ki...Ichigo, you really didn't need to knock him out quite so deeply." -> this seems like an awkward way to phrase it, in my opinion, why not go with something a little less bulky like '...Ichigo, you really didn't have to knock him out completely.' I think the issue I have with the 'quite so deeply' bit.

Similarly: "NOTHING!! YOU CALL ME AND MY PEOPLE AND MY PEOPLE'S AND MY HONOR NOTHING!! " -> I think you could snap that sentence down a touch, maybe to "You call me and my people and our honor nothing!". It'll flow better that way, make it easier to read. It's a stylistic issue I suppose, but you have a tendency every now and then, especially in dialogue, to get just a little too wordy. It might be something you want to look at and think about, because while it works, it could work better if you sliced out some things and simplified others.

That aside, I do love the psychology in this chapter. I love how Ichigo, after her trauma, immediately picks Roshi as the person to blame for not only the rape, but everything else that is wrong with her.

I'm also a fan of Tee's reaction to when he finds out what happened and why Ichigo was even more-than-usual irrationally angry. (Did that sentence even make sense?)

Okay, first big thing with this chapter...er...what happened to the divides? Everything's running together! It's super confuzzling and should really be addressed asap cos current format just isn't cutting it on the legibility level.

okay, so past the obvious thing. I'm a fan of the opening phrase, "Boxers pulled to a stop so fast that he almost fell out of the sky." It makes the shock an actual perceivable element. You have a spelling error in line three though "Be quite!" instead of 'quiet'.

I think, however that you could make the moment of realization when the moon blows up a little stronger. The bit where "Boxers said moments before the moon blew up." Just a thought, maybe you could build the speed of the phrase up a little by cutting it in half. "Boxers said. Moments later, the moon blew up." Or something. I think that the impact of an event like that needs a little more kick. On the grammatical side, you might wanna add in some commas here and there with the dialogue in the conversation between Ichigo and Durian, stylistically I mean; for example,
""Ggah," Durian gasped in pain." instead of ""Ggah" Durian gasped in pain." Looks cleaner imo, but then, that's just my opinion. :D

I like the addition of the journalistic element. It makes me think of that episode right before the Cell tournament, where Bulma's telling them to not go Super Saiyan to avoid becoming a news sensation, to which Vegeta makes that off color comment about simply destroying them all. This scene made me giggle, specially when Miss Gossip got fired.

And like I liked the opening, I like how Tee's complete idiocy is perfectly suited to diffuse the seriousness of the situation.