|Reviews for Cigarettes and Chocolate Milk|
| luise 12/25/12 . chapter 14
THIS FIC IS SO PERFECT, THANKS FOR WRITING IT
| Prevouslyknownasxocrazililkelo 10/24/12 . chapter 14
Wow, What a cute story, It was really touching and I was a totally Kathy with a Matt of my own .Too bad I didn’t have a Jack Mercer as back up. Kathy is a great Original Character since I feel like almost every girl to relate to and every girl had a guy like Jack in her life the untouchable mysterious bad boy . I love how in all your stories you give us these brilliant flashbacks that link into the present . Thanks for this cute romance!
| Ginny Hassler 10/20/12 . chapter 1
Wow! I am impressed
| Nizhoni 10/12/12 . chapter 14
There are some stories that are so captivating you have trouble thinking or doing anything else till you've finished reading...and then when it's over, you still can't stop thinking about how amazing it was and how sad you are when it is is one of those stories. I finished reading "Write your Own Song" today and needed more so I began reading this story and let me just say WOW! I am absolutely blown away, my expectations are surpassed by all degree imaginable. You are truly a skilled and passionate writer and I literally read this in one night because I couldn't stop. I laughed, I smiled, I teared I even squealed:) It was fantastic and I can't wait to read the oneshots you have written for this marvelous couple. and let me also say that Kathy was just a flawless character. She is real and awkwardly relatible and it made me enjoy the love story that much more. I honestly cannot stress how much I love this story, or how much I love your writing in general. If you ever write an orginal story through fictionpress pleeeeeease message me and let me know because I would be so happy to read it. Keep up with these exceptionally perfect stories and I am looking forward for more to come!
| Aliya 8/8/12 . chapter 14
So emotional atm, this story was really something special. I read it from begining to end and I had butterflies all the way through. Kathy was such a relatable and loveable character so she was a perfect OC in my eyes. The plot and how they fell back in love in one night was really beautiful. I cried as I was finishing, especially when Jack saw Evelyn after bring Kathy inside. I have a feeling she brought those two together in the coffee shop! 3 (i just watched the movie for the millionth time and was searching through the Four Brothers tag and found this and I have never been so glad!) I'm going to have happy dreams tonight. This story seriously took me outta the little funk I usually am in after wathing it. Jack Mercer is alive in my heart! :)
| ILoveAnime89 6/29/12 . chapter 14
| BriBri028 6/28/12 . chapter 14
Omfg that ending was so cute I'm like sobbing right now.
| jonah 6/6/12 . chapter 10
i read this story and i can not stop reading it i fell in love with bothe jack and kathy they are oppsite of each i love how you made the childhood freinds i can not see jack with anyone other than kathy now lol i wish that you write a sequal for them
| Tara Laurel 4/26/12 . chapter 14
I hadn't read this yet because I am wary of love stories with OCs, but after reading your other work I simply had to! This was amazing. It was so delicately and beautifully written. Simple, yet complex. Somber, yet comical. I like how Kathy did not have this incredibly violent and Jack-mirroring childhood that a lot of OC girls do. She had her problems and in no way am I downsizing them, but it wasn't over the top.
You are such a fantastic writer. Some of your lines here are just delivered so perfectly. "a song that was trying to form", Jack and the cat's truce, jail tome with Bobby being a Mercer tradition, the characters' contemplations on life, etc.
Great job. Love your work!
| Marauder and The Q 1/24/12 . chapter 14
So ... apparently I never reviewed the last chapter? Or the last few chapters, actually. And that's just wrong, because I love this story and you completely deserve all of the glowing praise that I can heap on you.
On to the show!
The play and the Christmas tree part were very cute. It's great how even though they're in a situation that, from the look of the movie, seems next to impossible, you've kept them very in character and haven't made it silly. (You're much too clever for that, but it happens a lot, so I appreciate it.)
This is such a poignant and significant line: "Part of him knew he'd made the right decision, though – in some ass backwards way, running away had made him realize just how screwed up his life was. He'd been standing still ever since he'd gotten out of the hospital, idling in neutral, not caring if his life ever moved forward."
I really like it. Very understandable. I think everyone's felt that way before.
"But he just felt like he was wired wrong; something had been broken in him ages ago and try as she might, Evelyn Mercer couldn't put everything back together again."
Aw, Jack. You break my heart.
"The one in her left hand Bobby had handed to him that first year he'd been with them, joking that the fairy should put all the fairy ornaments on the tree. It was delicate and pretty and the girliest ornament Evelyn owned." Nice touch.
Ooh, and this one, too: "He shrugged for the millionth time, studying the ink under his fingernails from his marathon songwriting session the night before." Bits like this are why your stories are so engaging. They have this almost tactile realism. Definitely the difference, for me, between a pretty good story and an excellent story that I'll continue to think about.
"And she's going to love you for you and not care about your past and your scars and the things you try so hard to hide. That's how love works."
There are no words for the goofy smile that line got out of me. I love your Evelyn. She makes me understand how the movie could have taken place, how four badass dudes could rain hell down upon Detroit to avenge her.
"Watching the way Angel had walked around in a confused daze ever since finding out he was going to be a father, Jack had a feeling Angel didn't know how to feel about the whole thing either." Ah, Angel.
"Bobby had his back to the house and Jack leaned forward a bit, peering around his stocky frame to get a clear look without being too obvious about it. He blew out a sigh with an exhale of smoke, grinding his cigarette out on the stump. 'Yeah, they're watchin'.'"
I just like how that's written. It's so easy to visualize everything you write, and it flows so well into the next thing. Also, it's adorable that they're watching.
"The doorbell. He could escape, even if for a second." I read that and my thoughts went like this: NOOOOOO! Don't answer the door, Jackie! And then I remembered that he lives in this story and you would never kill him. It was like some weird movie flashback.
Aw, Horatio. He's the true star of this story.
The end is so sweet! I'm going to miss this story. I really liked the pacing and format, and their relationship felt like a natural progression. Jack needs someone in his life that's not completely screwed up (or at least in a different way).
I ended up finding some of my old stories by accident a few days ago and when I reread them ... they weren't bad. I actually didn't hate my old stuff. So I went for this whole trip down memory lane and read some old stuff from you and a few other people and realized how long it's been since I reviewed (or since we talked at all, yikes). Anyway, my goal in this review was to not use the word "subtle," since apparently I've used it in every review I've ever left for you. I never noticed that until I read them all at once, but wow. It's like the lamest catchphrase ever. But apparently it's the word that I associate with you.
Thank you for writing this story and everything else you've written. It's been a blast reading all of it. You've always been one of my favorite writers (and I would stand by that if ever you were to be published, too). You have such a comfortable, natural style, with a great balance between humor and serious emotion without leaning toward silly or melodramatic.
P.S. I know I haven't been around in forever, but I did finally turn a friend on to Garrett last year. She gets it, lol. So I went on an on about how sweet and nice he is and how he should be in just about ever movie ever. And then she turned her friends on to him. I love when that happens.
| Nikki.Neurotic 12/2/11 . chapter 2
oookay i normally read til the last chapter that is up then i review but WTH how could they drop him from a band HE STARTED v.v thats low man hmph! _ i keep thinking of the band flyleaf and jack and kathy...haha come on wouldnt that be great they can start a band together _ and find other people and become super famous :D and the spares become nothing! TT they dont deserve their career i hope they go down the drain and beg to have jack back and jack is gana say nooo cuz he's makin his money and doin what he wants to do and bein famous nana-nana-na!
| StarLuna 11/29/11 . chapter 14
One word or three, I love it. :)
Seriously i love everything about this story. Kathy's character is every likable and one you can relate to. The whole issue of listening to your parents or doing what you want. I like how she was the dorky girl, I think it adds depth to Jacks character. Knowing that he can fall for a normal girl and not the groupies hes so fond of.
I like how each chapter has a flashback to connect the dots for us. Forcing us to go back and forth. This is where you are and this is how you got there. The depiction of characters are spot on. Well at least I think so. All the OC's in this story are exactly as they should be.
I especially liked the whole marshmallow thing very cute and the pokemon song made me laugh so hard. Ahh i loved it, thank you for writing it. I always had this nagging feeling that Jack deserved to live and there should be an OC involved but just never had a chance to write anything and now i don't have to. This story totally fills my requirements. Thank you and keep writing :)
| DreamQuill 8/21/11 . chapter 1
I'm here lovey! I really loved this first chapter. I'm slowly realizing the world beyond Twific exists. You're a great writer. It flowed so well.
| blissedoutvixen 7/31/11 . chapter 14
Things I loved about this story:
1: Your writing. It was excellent. This story was very well written and even the grammar was flawless.
2: The characters. You wrote them so well and made me fall in love with Jack, Kathy and Steve.
3: It made me cry. That might not sound like a good thing, but any story that's able to draw that much emotion from me is totally awesome.
This story rocked!
| blissedoutvixen 7/30/11 . chapter 7
It's midpoint, so I thought I'd review even though this is way finished. I adore this story! You're a great writer and I love your characters! And your taste in music!