i would dislike this story expect you've made it quite clear it's not going to be a "one of the boys falls in love with a pretty OC" kinda thing. well, maybe, but the focus i'm guessing is on edmund and peter and not some girlie that comes inbetween them.
eagerly awaiting the next. loved the fealty oath, by the way. peter knows his priorities, :)

I hope your writer's block eases soon. You've made a lovely start with this and I'm looking forward to the rest - no hurry: it will come when it's ready.

Peter and Edmund made me laugh! Please continue this soon!

This is really intriguing! I really hope you continue it soon! I wonder what it’s going to be about. Peter’s oath was deep and beautiful, and I’m glad Eustace was included. It’s interesting that the oath became a love song over the years… but poor Edmund!

Please still be updating. x

I liked the song in the prologue, do you write them yourself or get them from somewhere else? Ohh... Peter is noticing girls, his sibling's reaction ought to be interesting. So far so good, and update soon! =)

snicker. score one for Ed!

Onto watch list!

Hey, was perusing Youtube and found something that ought to help get those creative juices flowing again.

Enjoy! -> (remove spaces)
http: // w. youtube. com / watch?v=GwLVoOTB-zA

Hi there! It has been a while since i checked your stories for updates but i was pleasantly surprised to find this one. As always i love how you write Peter. He has such a wonderful humored outlook on the casual going-ons of the castle. Another thing i have found pleasing to me about your writing style is that you give just enough description of places and events to paint a vivid picture in my mind without going over board and loosing my interest in a maze of adjectives and adverbs. (Sorry Tolkien, but you can only describing a field or mountain so many ways before bashing your head against something hard and unforgiving.) ^_^ So thanks again for sharing your creativity and talent with us and i very much look forward to the next chapter!

As usual, your writing is impressive, and this story is no exception. The scene of the dogs trying to follow Peter and Edmund up the cliff is funny, and I particularly enjoy the line "Only in Narnia are jokes born and not made." It seems truly fitting of Edmund's character: wise, humorous, and good-natured. Descriptions are perfect, vivid and yet not overwhelming to the story, and your grasp of courtly dialogue is excellent. I will be most intrigued to see what happens with the lovely Lady Anelata, as I don't see you having either of the kings take a consort. I hope your Writer's Block abates soon, as that can be most painful. Best of luck.

I love Edmund's last line. It fits him perfectly.
A lot of young wirters have done the "princess comes to Cair Paravel, Peter just happens to think that she's beautiful" story-line, but I know that this one'll be great. =]
~C

So I finally got to sit down properly since this chapter was posted and look over it. Initially I danced a mental jig of glee upon seeing Peter's point-of-view. Before you posted the prologue I had kind of hoped that this one would be from his perspective since A Blessing of Rain was all Edmund, and here he is. I have to say that this chapter threw me off, it was as excuisitely written as always, but seemingly lighthearted after the prologue. Of course by the time I got to the end I remembered the ominous description, and began to wonder anew whose point-of-view it was meant to be in. I suspect that this delegation's visit will bring much more than Peter's first crush and I am now thoroughly intrigued. I enjoyedthe dogs as usual, the mountain goat guard, and the boys' appetites (loved Peter's comment on a law to protect uneaten food). The closing interaction was priceless. I will now eagerly await the next installment.

Perfect, as always. Life has kept me from writing and reading alot of fanfiction but I have to say I miss your stories the most.
I love the hounds. I know I told you this before but I still adore them. There should be not only a Narnian law against unattended food but also a law here!
I'm excited to see what is going to happen! Gosh, I missed your stories!!

What I love about this chapter is all of the Narnian geography.
The descriptions of the different places, combined with Peter's impressions make for some very powerful imagery.
The visitors from Archenland are an interesting bunch, and I'm looking forward to seeing the role they will play in this story.
Excellent chapter.

Oh... oh my. I didn't know it would be /that/ story.
Beautifully written, good my friend, as ever. It's nice to see the boys getting some down-time, and just being boys for a change. In a way, it's kind of comforting to see, and even nicer to see the mixture of love, respect and care that the Narnians show for their Kings. The dogs were spot on in their worry, and I can just imagine the small, wry amusement that the goats may have gotten from watching their less-than-graceful charges mount the cliffs.
As soon as I saw the mother and daughter, though, I got an idea of where this story will be going. Without ruining it for everyone else, I will just say this... it's going to be interesting to see how this goes, and if there is anything at all that I can do to help, let me know, 'kay?
Lovely to see you back in Narnia, E. Missed you :)
Ever your friend,
~Blue