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LazyCatfish27
2009-03-10 . chapter 8
lolz @ "Some people in Australia, might not of quite heard you."

Since I'm quoting the sentence here anyways, let me take the opportunity to inform you: You do not need a comma there. In fact, the comma is not only unnecessary; it splits up the sentence awkwardly. You are using the preposition "of" where it should be the verb "have". You make both of these mistakes often throughout the fic. I'm not saying this to be mean. Correct grammar makes for a more readable (and therefore more enjoyable) story.
Jacalyn Hyde
2009-03-09 . chapter 8
That was a good place to end it. I'm happy I could help, you're awesome too. It's getting complicated with this triangle love thing and I get the feeling Charleena could be evil if she wanted to. You also set up the dynamics nicely with Death Eaters on various levels and their fun torture. Of course, I already know what happens next but I still can't wait to see it on the site. This is great and I can't wait to see how it finally works out. Love.
David Fishwick
2009-03-09 . chapter 8
Excellent and thanks for writing a cool chapter. Please update when you can as I am enjoying the plot.
xxDibDabxx
2009-03-09 . chapter 8
Yay! I loved it! Poor Charlie though! Wow, Roddy can be a twat sometimes. But yay for Bells! Go independant women! Hell yeah! XD
Hopefully there will be fighting in the next chapter?? You do fight scenes good! Hehe, update soonish pretty please x
David Fishwick
2009-03-09 . chapter 7
Please write more as I am enjoying the story. Thanks for writing.
LazyCatfish27
2009-02-19 . chapter 7
Eh, I'm curious to find out what will happen even though I don't really like Charleena very much and Bella seems OOC...
LazyCatfish27
2009-02-19 . chapter 6
Too much Charleena, not enough Bella!!
LazyCatfish27
2009-02-19 . chapter 5
Ooh, did they?
LazyCatfish27
2009-02-19 . chapter 4
I thought the Cruciatus curse couldn't actually kill people?
LazyCatfish27
2009-02-19 . chapter 3
So... an OC falls in love with Rodolphus... odd idea...
xxDibDabxx
2009-02-17 . chapter 7
very long! but worth it! i liked this chapter *sniff* poor harry! update soon please x
Jacalyn Hyde
2009-02-17 . chapter 7
I like the scene you added about Bellatrix being trusted with information Charleena wasn't. Though the Dark Lord's reply, “Yes, you have been in my service longer.” Drove me crazy. That's not what she wants to hear but it's better than it could be. Great job keeping everyone in character. This was a longer chapter than usual and I'm not complaining. I'd like to see more from charleena next time and her thoughts on the issues Bellatrix mentioned this time. I can't wait for more. Great job. Love.
David Fishwick
2009-02-10 . chapter 5
Excellent idea and I liked Bella and Charlie fighting over Rodolphus. Please write more thanks.
Jacalyn Hyde
2009-02-05 . chapter 6
I love this scene, it's not supposed to be funny but it kind of is. Is it bad I love their sort of immature arguments? All the same, I am glad you are remaining focused on Charleena's purpose while still providing drama. Very nice, I can't wait for your next.
xxDibDabxx
2009-02-05 . chapter 6
loved it! and bellatrix and charlie fighting at the dinner table! lmso! please update soon hun x
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