Though its smutty - like it should be - i found it sweet at the ending. -Avi

lol this was extremely hot! They're some straight freaks lol

Wow that has got to be THE Hottest thing I've ever read

you forgot gluttony!

well damn if that wasn't lust then idk what is! good fiction

You forgot Gluttony...other then that excelent

Just thought you should know. Sloth - aversion to work or exertion; laziness; indolence. Nothing whatsoever to do with sadness or depression. As for Pride, well just because her father is pridefull doesn't make her guilty by association. Is Trigon and Lucifer the same by the way? I didn't think they were . . . Anyhoo, I taking the stuff Iwrote into account, I believe you're 2 deadly sins short.

Other than that, it's a good story.

Hey Kelsey!

aw, the story looks nice when put together. Heh. Glad people like this story!

And I like the last bit that you added. It tied it off very nicely. :D

I'd be glad to do it again some other time!


- mayra

It's about time another good oneshot came around.

Dialogue is a little weak, but everything else is superb. You don't even notice it once you read into the jucy stuff.

You both have a knack for this kind of writing, obviously, and you do it well. It's not over repetitive, overly descriptive (which is my vice), or immaturely written. It's grand, bold, mature and rich with everything a one shot like this should have.

Kudos. Keep up the wonderful work.

Wow... I've been needing that for a while. Great job! Keep it up!

damn if thats bn human then i need a release too... i haven't had one in 2months talk about agony lol sweet one-shot

Woohoo!~ Great job! I hope you write more.