Good chapter. I am looking forward for the next one!

Check your spelling and the punctuation symbols - you have forgotten to use ' and also the capitalization of Dream and other off words should be watched. Proof your work. I also remember seeing a lowercase p in Pippin - watch that as well. Last, you mention the dream way too many times. Spend some time with the story - think about what you are going to say adn write it down. Make sure you edit and keep practicing.

Very good. Do write more soon.

Interesting story. I would suggest not using the bold font - it hurts my eyes. Plus, watch some videos of Merry & Pippin and read up on them. You are close to portraying the characters properly, it just needs some tweaking.

Pretty good. Please do write more soon.