it's awesome, i love it! for some reason, the fanfictions when Matsumoto already loves Gin seem to be the most exciting! lolz GO HITSUMATSU!

This one was kind of sad, but I can so see Ichimaru tormenting Toshiro like that.

Wow. The last line is..amazing...

That was interesting. I find it had a poetic feel to it. Poetry is very good in writings. But I have to wonder, what would the story be like after Gin betrayed? Would Hitsugaya have a chance then? You should try it. ^^

Good job!
~SoaringHellButterfly.

Very well done, I liked it a lot! I felt that the beginning was a bit awkward but after that everything went smoothly and was enjoyable to read. Not to many mistakes either, you did incredible for not speaking English as a first language!

Aw that's so sad. But true, in a way. That's probably just what Hitsugaya would be thinking before the betrayal (assuming he had his eye on Matsumoto). Nice writing, as well, very easy to read although there were a couple little things. Like "her slightly affection" should be "slight". Reading stuff aloud helps me catch those types of things. Well done :)

It's well written, especially if English is not your first language. You've done better with grammar and spelling than several people I know who only speak English.

I can't say if I woudl like to see more, simply because I'm not certain what direction you anticipate taking if you do continue. Though, if I were the author (which I obviously am not, lol), and as a reader, I would enjoy seeing this turned into a fic about Hitsugaya helping Matusmoto overcome her attachments to Gin after the betrayal. If you should decide to do so, please let me know!

And, if you need help with anything, or a beta-reader, of sorts, I'd be happy to assist you. You just have to ask. 8-)

Beautiful writing!
-Rachel Noelle