|Reviews for Shards of Memory|
| Tintti 11/28/12 . chapter 31
Hey! I would like to say something about your chapter 31 where the Emperor and Jecht battle. I am a veeery big Emperor fan and this chapter really made me furious. The way you mock Mateus and his powers is outrageous! First of all he is defeated by Jecht alone! Lets recall Final Fantasy 10...in this game Jecht is only a human with some powers granted by Yu Yevon. And in FF2 Mateus is already really powerful IN THE BEGINNING of the game and in the end of the story he is literally TWO GODS AT THE SAME TIME! So Mateus Jecht but how is it that even when the Emperor has the crystal of darkness he is easily defeated and Jecht can land blows on the Emperor like his powers were nothing (and now the Emperor literally is a god with his crystal). And on top of that Jecht smashed Mateusmeteor (STARFALL! Which is the Emperors GREATEST ATTACK!) to pieces with JUST BARE HANDS! (In this scene my mind was shouting "WHAT THE FUUUUCK!") And when Chaos kills the Emperor he literally throws away his only MASTERMIND. Mateus created their schemes and is the most intelligent of all the villains. So (stupid) Chaos just throws his greatest asset into a pool of lava... _ and the Emperors pleading and crying to Chaos to safe his life was so OFF CHARACTER. He is the fucking EMPEROR! HE WILL NEVER PLEAD OR CRY TO ANYONE! And his death over all was really insulting to this great character - Mateus deserves better. I understand if you prefer Jecht over Mateus but that scene wasnt realistic and I really dont get why you even wrote that SHITTT! (sorry...) in your great story. I really enjoyed this far. But I dont know if I can bring myself to read your story to the end. You ruined my favorite character and I can never forgive you. ( sorry if I was too harsh on you...)
| RandomReviewer 9/26/12 . chapter 41
Thank you so much for writing this, it's been an enjoyable ride from beginning to end. The action was epic, the storyline itself intriguing, and every character was fleshed out so well, you left no one's story undertold.
I know that sometimes writing something this massive and sticking to it can be one of the hardest challenges to accomplish, but you've more than surpassed those challenges, and the passion you have shows brightly through the words in this story.
Here's to this story's Cloud and Terra, and all of their comrades.
| Ikatsui 9/12/12 . chapter 41
I very much enjoyed this. It took me several days to finish, and I enjoyed the time I wasted. This fanfic is superb, dragging me along for quite the ride.
Now, if only you made a continuation. Terra adjusting to life in Cloud's world would be quite the interesting fic.
| Non entity 8/22/12 . chapter 1
Seeing as all I've been doing is reviews I decided to dig up some old favorites and see what got me into the in the first place.
I can honestly say that this story alone held a strong place in my heart from the moment I clicked on the title to read chapter one ages ago. I distinctly remember dealing with a poor Internet connection and nosy family as I sat down to read. Even after I got my own set up for fanfiction I still used the junky pc to read this, because it was where I started the journey, so why not finish there?
Enough on me though, time for the hazy stuff. While at least six months since I can last recall reading this, I can say I was hooked at every chapter. I saw characters interact in ways that made more sense than the actual games depiction, and eventually regarded your own tale as vastly superior to the original. Even after duodecim came out you stuck to your guns, while incorporating the slightest hints about things from before that could have happened. The tale woven was excellent, and the subtle romance was quite nice in comparison to what is on this site (mostly junk and fangirl posts that should be relegated to fansites). I appreciate the time, effort, and quality that went into this piece of work.
So we salute you, Mr. Actually Writes Good Fanfiction Guy (echoes) and we give you a cyber beer in thanks. And a plate of those cookies too. Supposedly they're actually not bad.
| loonytunecrazy 3/7/12 . chapter 2
Another exllcent chapter here nice with the the refernace to the orginal gamnes
| loonytunecrazy 2/27/12 . chapter 1
Exllcent start here
| cloud and terra FC 11/28/11 . chapter 41
I really love it.
| Maeniel Celeres 11/12/11 . chapter 41
A perfect ending...to a perfect story.
I have been reading this story since you first posted it in 2009, and upon reading the first chapter, I was hooked, eagerly awaiting the next. Hated how long it took for you to update, but when you deliver such excellent chapters, the wait is worth it.
Every chapter since that very first has been well written, and while it may not be exactly how the games story went, I actually find myself liking you're version better.
The Cloud and Terra romance was very believeable, and was well worth the wait when it finally came to a head. I never really thought of them as a couple to be honest until I started reading you're story, and watched videos on the Japanese version of the game (Before I got my own copy of course). Got to say, I think it will be my favourite Cloud pairing from now on :).
All in all, I loved the whole story, and epilogue was really satisfying...I loved how you showed each character, back in their own world. Although I must admit, I did want to see Tifa and the gangs reaction to Terra...but I suppose that would have been too much, and possibly harmed the ending. The epilogue with Tidus...well I always thought that the time he was away, was the time that he was fighting in Dissidia...I tohught it fit in rather nicely. But I do like how you did it, so Im not complaining.
Congratulations on finishing a fantastic story, and sharing it with all of us Drake.
| Shade the Bat 11/8/11 . chapter 41
A long project complete, and one hell of a great story!
You did an awesome job and had me hooked since the beginning
| 3 Phantoms 11/8/11 . chapter 41
Alas the tale comes to an end. It's kind of sad that it's ended but I liked the ending all the same. Good luck with your future projects, I look forward to them! BTW couldn't Shinryu have just sent Terra home then transported her to Cloud's world? After all he sucked 'em into the converging world.
| LordofVermillion 11/6/11 . chapter 41
It's always a bittersweet feeling when a story ends. I thoroughly enjoyed your work as well as your interpretations of Dissidia lore. I'm pretty sure some fans might cry for a sequel, but I honestly think it's best to leave what happens afterwards to fan interpretation like all good stories.
Have a good one and I hope you'll continue writing when inspiration hits you
| Seproth 11/6/11 . chapter 41
... wow I don't even know where to begin. First and foremost congratulations on finishing a story of this... scale. Easily one of if not the best piece of Dissidia fanfiction out there (no offense to other authors) and easily the longest. Holy hell
This chapter alone took me something like 2 and a half hours to read.
With that said I mean... even I don't know what to say. I have questions. Most of them are where do they go from here... which was the point of the epilogue
I suppose first and foremost was Omega the true villain of this entire story? Was he planned to exist or did he just pop up at some point and you ran with the idea?
Do you plan to if anything do the occasional one shot set in this universe you created if anything just for your own personal amusement or are you content with everything as it is and letting us the fans imagine what comes next for our heroes?
Well I have more questions I'd like to ask but I need to get my thoughts back together its been a long day of reading this.
With that said I loved your story I've been following it for... what two years now? Ever since chapter 12 when Terra and Cloud fought Gabranth. Actually I never even read the opening chapters I just started there. Hmmm I suppose I should go back and read the opening chapters.
Really I'm sad to see the story end but all great stories come to an end.
As I said before congratulations sir, you've wrote an epic story and it ended beautifully... Goodbye Shards of memory. You've been an epic tale
Thank you drake for sharing this story with us. *bows* I do hope to see more from you soon. Your an amazingly talented writer. However I think for now you've earned a bit of a break from writing.
| Cloud Ex-SOLDIER 11/6/11 . chapter 41
One of the best i've read. Your descriptions of all of the characters, especially Cloud and Terra were very well detailed and made it easy for the reader to get into the story.
The last bit with Aerith, was great, it was a nice way of getting Terra into Cloud's world.
It would be cool to see a oneshot of Cloud and Terra on adventure, seeing Cloud's friends and the sights.
Best of luck in the future.
| Scuttlest 11/6/11 . chapter 41
Either I've been unobservant, or you uploaded two chapters at the same time. Ah well, this review discusses both chapter 40 and chapter 41.
A very nice display of Shinryu. I probably wouldn't interpet him as having four eyes, but that's just me. I most definitely would interpet him as being so staggeringly powerful he could smite the Cosmos Warriors (as well as the Chaos Warriors) without much effort. Seeing as his dialogue is presented in italics, I'm not sure if the quotation marks were really necessary.
When Terra asked to go to Cloud's word, I had just sorta shrugged and said "Eh, it figures". Then Shinryu said it was impossible, and I say "Oh."
Two mistakes in this chapter. At one point, Shinryu says "Cid, our pact broken, will eventually into nothingness-". Either the word 'fade' is missing, or the word 'disappear' is missing.
Later, when everyone is saying their goodbyes, after Squall makes his line, Bartz says "That's the sprit!" Missed an i in 'spirit'.
After the way chapter 40 ended with Terra waking up in her world, and Cloud waking up in his, I figured this would mostly be just those two getting up to speed back in their world, forced to live apart from each other. I'm proven wrong, and this chapter is basically an epilogue for the nine heroes, with Golbez and Jecht thrown in.
Personally, I'm somewhat surprised that Firion's epilogue doesn't even mention Leon. Considering the way FFII ended, with them all waiting for Leon to return, I'd be inclined to think that he would think about Leon fairly often.
Though I'm well aware that Bartz probably is more of a solo adventurer sort, I'm actually somewhat surprised that Faris just gets a mention, and Faris, Leena, or Krile don't pop up at all. Eh.
When there was a mention of a 'ruckus' in Baron, I actually thought of Edge and Palom immediately, ha! (Er... Palom is the Black Mage right? I get the twins mixed up every once in a while) I like that Golbez is going to be living with his family.
Zidane's section was entertaining. I'm normally used to overly cheerful characters just driving me up the wall, but sometimes I find one that is well and truly likable as a character.
When Terra and Cloud showed up again near the end, I initially assumed that the two would just spend some time dwelling on the other, and 'somehow' hear each other, if just for a moment. I'm proven wrong when the two manage to reunite and have a happy ending together, thanks to Aerith. Though I'm left wondering how the kids will react to Terra's sudden absence, or how the VII characters might react to Terra.
I must say, reading this chapter, I kept asking myself, "Will the Warrior of Light's world get addressed here?" Guess that didn't happen. Heh. Still, I think the mark of a good story is one that has me asking "what if-" and "maybe-" several times over. This certainly had me doing that.
35 pages long, you say? Longest document I've ever written was a solid 37 pages in length and about 17,000 words, which ends up kind of annoying when I have a self-rule of reading something three times over the same day I submit it. Yikes.
Seeing as how much there was to read, I probably can't bring up every spelling error I noticed while reading. So I'll just list a few.
In Bartz's epilogue, he says "He was sure the scholars at the Library of the Ancients would know more about this place, if he could get over to them and task to them." 'task' should be 'talk'.
In Firion's epilogue, when one bandit retorts at the noble, it says "the bandit shorted", did you intend to say "snorted"?
During the second Cecil scene, when Golbez explains the fight with the Crystelle to Cecil, there's the line "The shoulders and head a familiar figure". Perhaps you should use the word 'of' to make it 'The shoulders and head of a familiar figure'
Hey, congratulations on this story. I probably couldn't write something like this. Hope you find something new to focus on, fanfic-wise.
| HeroOfFate 11/6/11 . chapter 41
I have followed this story for quite a while and i must say this, this was hands down the best story I have ever read on this site period.