You have a great idea going here, and you do a great job writing it. You have an excellent combination of narration, description, and vibrant dialogue to put the reader into the story.

You really ought to write more of this story. I certainly would like to see where this story can go.

You have to write more to this.

i really love the idea of usagi/serena having a son. but you should put renee in there too.

Now this is an idea I've seen for the first time - I'm really curious where you'll go with it ... I'm looking forward to the next chapter!

Wow!! This is pretty cool as a one shot! I would not mind for it to be continued, but I also like how as of this moment that it is open-ended. Nice job!!

Ah! This is too good to be a one shot. This could a great story darn you lol

aw, what a cute idea!

Well, what can I say? I'm amazed, finally a new, original idea!
I think, it wouldn't be bad if you leave this piece as a one-shot and the rest of the story to our imagination. But if you decide to continue I'll make sure to read it!

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Oh wow. This would really be an amazing story if you decided to continue it. But I really like it, it's interesting.