 Azrael-013 2/25/09 . chapter 1Okay... your spelling, grammar and formatting are shot, this is in script form but has been pretty lenient on that lately so we'll let it slide, and you took a potentially good crossover idea and turned it into a sugar-filled, rushed and half-assed delivery. I am almost tempted to call troll.
But this line almost saves the entire thing'Who needs reputation when you're God.(Incidentally, change that period to a question mark.
Keep reading and writing and in due time you'll improve. |