Continue please! :)

Awesome I defently want to see the next chapter

, pretty, pretty, !

Good start! Please continue!

!xFrankiex!

I think this si great so far so you should carry on!

This is interesting... but I have a few words that need to be said.

Spell check.

Grammar.

Syntax.

Commas after personal thoughts and dialogue if you don't use a period.

Okay, this is a crossover, but it's not another freakin' Twilight one, so cudos on that. You have decent grammar and spelling, another bonus. And you crossed Max Ride with one the best book series ever written! However, long chapters would be prefferable. Also, don't change POVs so often. It confuses the reader and distracts from the main plot. I suggest changing POV only a max of twice every chapter, but that's just my opinion.

So far I'm loving this, so don't you go abandoning this story! (It's a cross of His Dark Materials and Max Ride, what is there not to love?)

-Bluefire of ThunderClan

(P.S. Will the flock get daemons like Will did? 'Cause I'd love to see what Max's would be!)