 Jayim Duinara 8/9/10 . chapter 1Hello,
This was very well done. You captured the episodic feel from the show perfectly. I could see and here everything just like it was one of the normal episodes. One minor critique: if the last paragraph was a reference to Mr. Snow, the previous recipient of the paper, his first initial was 'L', not 'J'.
Excellent writing,
The PreacherMan |
 Brian 5/1/10 . chapter 1 Very nice story. Like the way you interwove who the lady was (not a stripper) and the other parts of the plot. Keep up the good writing ! |
 Victory-Starr 1/24/06 . chapter 1You may never even read this (it's been so long!), but here it is; I liked your story! It was very well written! Keep up the great work! |
 Anna McLain 9/2/01 . chapter 1 Excellent! You suceeded in providing vivid imagery. Wonderfully well-written. |
 Shadow the silly 6/7/01 . chapter 1I like the story. One thing though wasn't the guy who had the paper before Gary, Lucious Snow? |
 Malcolmius 8/8/00 . chapter 1 Excellent story, you captured perfectly the style and art of Early Edition. I assume you are a big fan of the show? I was, but they took it off of CBS and I dont have cable, so, I never saw it again. You would have been a good writer for the show. Cool story! |