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| Jho 2002-04-10 ch 1,  | abuseAhh nice story, I've read this type of story a lot. |
| Jeff Alan 2002-01-27 ch 1, | abuseHey, it might be a topic that's been done before, but you handled it quite well. The only reason the ending was obvious is because people have seen other stories like it. You actually handled the delivery very well and if it had been the first of its kind, I doubt I would have guessed the play on words. Overall, a good little fic. |
| Priya-chan 2001-12-27 ch 1, | abuseMien gott! *HOW* many double meanings can you give to words and paragraphs??? O.O |
| DarkCrucifix 2001-12-09 ch 1, anon. | abuse*cough cough, hack* Well,... that was, uh... damn... can't think of the exact word. |
| Virus 2001-12-06 ch 1, anon. | abuseYou underestimate the intelect of readers, not everyones a complete sicko, not to point fingers or anything. If they were training for the twin angel Shinji would've had a different approach to Asuka's proposals. He also wouldn't have acted like he did if he were IC, yes I'm saying he was OOC, not much but enough. Not bad, but not great, I don't think this is the best idea for a one shot since it holds no real plot or to me enough significance to support anything very interesting. |
| Shearre 2001-12-05 ch 1, anon. | abuseFunnyness. Don't get any ideas, this fic is ONLY good 'cause it's original. You try anything like that again and your dead. Got it, DEAD! Funny as hell though.... ROTFL |
| Weltall Elite 2001-12-05 ch 1, | abuseAHAHA!! That was brief, but pretty funny, WM! I was wondering where you were taking this since you kept beating around the bush. Very good. |
| Derek Zischke (not signed i... 2001-12-05 ch 1, anon. | abuseThe twist was very obvious, yes, but I think in a way that added to some of the jokes ('Why don't you try it with Ayanami?' for instance.). Very amusing little wordplay. |
| Shimiha 2001-12-03 ch 1, | abuseI know this isn't a dirty fic... I know this isn't a dirty fic... I know this isn't a dirty fic... I know this isn't a dirty fic... I know this isn't a dirty fic... Still it made me chicle and that's always a good thing especialy after watching Serial Experiments Lain. Can't comment on the grammer or spell as i am crappy at both. (That's why the gods of MS Office 200 gave me spell and grammer check) not bad 7 out of 10 because only gave me a chuckle. |
| Mari~G~ 2001-12-03 ch 1, anon. | abusewooooooopsies! I obviously din' get it! Damn! I gotta stop doin' dat! Sorry, sorry! I din continue, cuz i don like shinjixasuka stuff, anywayz it wasn't wha i thought it oz, so my apoligies! REALLY REALLY SORRY! Good job! Sowwy!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It oz funny! It got me fooled!!!!hehe... Well, turns out i'm da hentai^_^ hehe... SORRY!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
| Mari~G~ 2001-12-03 ch 1, anon. | abuseAW!!!!! You sick, sick person!!!! PERVERT!!!! BAKA NO HENTAI!!! WHY ASUKA OF ALL PEOPLE? SHINJI? SICK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
| Shinji Ikari 2001-12-03 ch 1, anon. | abuseBlah to predictiable but none the less funny. I knew it was either going to be a book for yoga or extercises. I love the play on words though its funny as hell. Keep up the good work. |
| q2eddie 2001-12-03 ch 1, | abuseAhhh... Double-entendre goodness! Bye. -e2 |
| Trigger 2001-12-03 ch 1, anon. | abuseHAHAHA LOL! nice one! |
| lord of the lemons 2001-12-03 ch 1, anon. | abuseNot bad word play... but about 3 years ago I came across this delightful almost lemon fic which applied the same concept. I'll send it to ya if I can ever find it in my hard drive... |