more! u cant just cut it off there!! not fair!! :P lol

i was wandering y he cut his hair in the book ... thanx 4 clearing up the mystery :)

hey kool idea about christophers thoughts i always wanted 2 know his point of view ... though this isnt the meg cabot version but so wat? im really glad ur writing this :)

Update soon :) Can't wait to see what happens

kay
Update when you can
Good story

The story's great! I can't wait to read the next chapter!

I really like your idea... but i think you could be WAY more descriptive and add more detail! But good idea you got goin there!

you're doing a great job and i love how your doing this great story your a great writer and should keep writing
p.s. i just read being Nikki as well luved it, hate Brandon, love chris, can't wait till runway!!

kk
Sorry if I was impatient
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Take all the time you need. I understand that it's hard to write.

This is amazing, please update, I really want to find out the happy ending!

great!
Please update again
Cant wait for the chapter when christopher finds out the truth

Please continue the story! I thought it was great! I would love to hear the rest of it!

Hey,

Just discovered this fic today.
I find it all right. I mean, the plot is good enough, and it's moving along nicely.

And if you are sensitive to critisism (like me. I can dish but I can't take it. I'm such a hyppocrite)don't bother to read this. I'll remove it if it bothers you. I don't mean to be mean, if you think it is.
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You have to check for typos. I'm just really picky or something, but...It distracts me fromreading. For example,you spelled "sadly" wrong way too many times. It counters the effect of the writing. Sometimes your writing can be so intense and angsty and well written (I love angst...Emo stage, lol)and then the moment's ruined by the wrong spelling, or grammar, or lousy dialouge. And try making the dialouge better by using commas and separating the dialouge a little from the paragraph. Sometimes I couldn't tell who was talking.

And sometimes the characters are very OOC. I don't think Christopher would just believe that Nikki's Em over instant messaging. And remember that chapter when Em's in a bikini? I thought Em had a normal body and a somewhat big butt (I read that somewhere in Being Nikki, when Whitney's making fun of her?), not something amazing. I just hate perfect people in stories- they seem so fake and unreal, so you can't relate to them. And relating to them is key, for me, when reading anything.

Also, your chapters are short to the point of choppy. Try making it more fluent and longer chapters, or combine your chapters to make them longer. It gets kind of annoying having to read it in short chunks; it kind of ruins your fic's effecton me.

And I totally understand if you delete this review, 'cause if I got a review like this, I'd probably get really mad and not bother to take any advice off of it. Sorry if it offends you.

But you have the potential to make your fic so much better. Just my opinion.

-Cyn

P.S. It's not bad- I'm still going to read it

PRETTY COOL i like ur chapters on airhead