I took my time reading this, but I love it. Very well done and well planned. Great job, and thanks for writing. It was well thought out with many twists and turns and something new in every chapter. Thanks again!

I really loved this story- and that's saying a lot as I normally don't like The Chronicles of Narnia stories that much. I liked the books, but I'm not Christian, so people who put too much focus on the religious meanings behind it make me a little uncomfortable. Just mainly because I don't totally understand what they're talking about.

But, anyways, yours was well-written, pretty incharacter, despite the fact that Peter seemed almost TOO real(although, that's not necessarily a bad thing) but Susan's part at this last chapter... amazing. I never liked her as much as Lucy, largely because her character would simply be someone I would have difficulties relating to and getting along with in real life. Here, however, you gave her that extra dimension that I always wished she would show. That one part that I never fully got from the books, but I can see clearer now that I see her from someone else's point of view. So, thank you. I really enjoyed the story!

you are brilliant..love this so much

Thank You, Thank You, Thank You!

The first is for writing such an amazing Narnia story. I'm still often disappointed by the sheer number of bad OC and self-insert stories that exist in this fandom (if you have any recommendations for a good fic I'd LOVE to hear them). But you've written a story about love, friendship and family, about doing the wrong thing for the right reason, and the right thing for the wrong reason. Your Pevensies are not perfect and all the better for it.
The story was fantastic, read it all in one go. Very detailed and layered. And thank you for writing an end to Susan that I am able to reconcile with my less than pleased initial reaction to her fate.

First of all, I have to say how much I enjoyed the Bible verses at the beginnings of each chapter. They all fit so well with the story, but I have to say I am impressed- some of them were so obscure (you've actually read Habakuk-wow!) I also enjoyed the vocabulary lessons at the end of each chapter-as old as I am, you managed to teach me a thing or two.
As far as the story, I really enjoyed this story, the plot was so well thought out, the characters were spot-on and the emotions were so heart-felt. I love stories that show how the kids react to being back home and the idea that they may have brought back some of the magic, both good and bad, with them is intriguing. This was a bit more fantasy that the original series, if that makes any sense, but I loved that element, that the fantasy was something that just follows them, no matter where they are or what they do. I am glad to read that you are going to pursue a carreer in literature, you have a wonderful voice and I hope you are able to share it in original works as well.
I hate the cannon ending, by the way, such a terrible way to end such a lovely serires, but your idea that Susan turned away from Aslan because of something that was done to her, not just because she became a silly woman, makes it a little better, and the idea that somehow after the tradegy, that she takes what happened and make a new start with her life to help others find Aslan and avenge her family is a nice touch. Thank you so much for your wonderful story. I really enjoyed it.

I don't usually review a story until I am done reading the completed chapters, but I had to stop and let you know how much I am enjoying this story. I love stories that deal with not only how the children deal with being back in England, but also how England would react to these strange adult children with their sense of honor and chivalry that would be so out of place in their boarding school environment. I am really enjoying your plot, with new, more modern dangers creeping in and the kids using their unique abilities to rise to the challenge. I love your use of the "ancient" Narnia language as a secret code between the brothers (is that actually written down somewhere, like Klingon, or are the words your unique creation? Either way, genius plot device). Thank you for your story so far, I can't wait until I have time to read the rest.

Very nice, good job with the flashbacks, and I'm ever grateful for the vocabulary definitions at the end of the chapters Keep up the good work!

Absolutely captivating)

Great story! I loved how much you included of the old narnian language and the notes at the end explaining vocab. From this story alone I'd say you'd do great as an English teacher and wish you tons of luck! the plot of the story and POV were some times a bit hard to follow but the quality was superior the whole way through. I particularly liked Peter and Edmund's discussion at the end as well as the parts from Cain's perspective. Keep up the great work and I hope to read more of your work soon

I have to honestly say I've never enjoyed reading a story written in the first person ever, but you've done such a great job of it and the characters are just so believable. Tis very well written. Thank you for your hard work! I look forward to reading more of your work.

Oh my gosh...OK, I'm dumb, but I just popped over from Monochrome to refresh my memory on Collins, and then I clicked the drop-down for chapter selection, and then I realized all the chapter titles can be abbreviated 'PE'... Bit slow, but I just wanted to tell you that it's brilliant, your stories are brilliant, your writing is brilliant, and your Narnia fanfiction picks me up when I've had a bad day.
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Hello there I was reading through this for the umpteenth time because it's just that awesome, and I noticed a bit of a grammatical error. At one point, you say'Ed? Where you sick earlier? and it should be "Were" rather than "Where". But um...yes. I just wanted to let you know. Other than that, excellent work, as always!

I love the ending with Susan, and all the extra tidbits like the vocal, Bible bits, old narnian...:)

Wow. It's been a long, interesting, bumpy ride! You handled it all very nicely.

I am amazed, astounded and jealous beyond words of you and this story! Thank-you so much for sharing!