grammar and wording could do with a little work in some places. but the story is well-paced, lots of twists, love the main characters humour and overall its a good read.

I like that the story is apart from the main plot of the game. because I always thought the world of Fallout 3 was a great setting to use and you could make tons of decent stories from it, so its a little annoying when I see people just try to rewrite the plot from the game using the main characters. I feel that your story is set quite close to the game (in terms of location, characters) but is also far enough removed (in terms of plot/events, main characters) for it to be quite interesting.

so yeah, yours is one of the better Fallout 3 stories that I've read so far. will definitely check out some of your other stuff.

Ooh nice cliffhanger. I'm glad you updated, can't wait for more.

You finally updated. Good chapter, I like how almost all of the main characters are dark and evil. It's fitting, considering that the world is an irradiated hellhole.
Please write more for this story, I'm very interested in it.

This was amazing! Please write more!

Great chapter, I love how you made the vaultie the villain and told the story from an anonymous Wastelander's perspective.

Very good, that's all I can say.

First and foremost, a very witty chapter title. I like. Oh, drama in Megaton! Now there's two of them. Oh good.

Great descriptions throughout, with Our Hero (henceforth Oh)'s level of physical damage and pain, exploding Megatonian heads, and general destructive chaos.

She's as crazy as the 106'ers! Panic, terror and travesty. Thrice-cursed landmines. Now I'm doubly intrigued; a psychotic vaultie on the loose and Megaton's water processor in smithereens- can't be a good start to the day. I'd drink, too.

Intriguing! I really like the way you give a basic character description without divulging the whole backstory, leaving us guessing as to what this guy's history is. Good use of first person- it's not my style of choice, but works well here and you've done a good job keeping it from getting confusing.

Good stuff!

Hope to see updates soon.

Very nice hope you update soon

I don't usually write reviews but I liked this one! I especially liked the vaultie being evil, which is pretty rare. Seeing from the perspective of a semi-regular guy is genius. Hope you finish the story! I actually did the same exact thing with my character in Big Town. ;)

Well, I spent most of the first chapter just trying to figure out who your protagonist was, which, admittedly, detracted a bit from me actually paying attention to what was going on in that chapter. My fault. I'd at first come to the conclusion that it was Jericho, and then you had Jericho show up behind him. Then I'd decided it was the nameless guard that stands watch in Moira's shop before you showed us that it's not him, either.

Anyway, you're taking quite the risk going "off reservation" as it were, taking a nameless/faceless NPC and writing from their perspective. Not that this is a bad thing, mind you, just saying, it's risky. But hey, if you think you can pull it off, more power to ya. Risks are all part of the game, after all.

As for the rest of it, I do like the direction you've taken things, using the Vaultie's rampage as a backdrop, showing how other people struggle to get by in the chaos she leaves in her wake. Playing through as the Vault Dweller, it's all too easy to start believing in your own hype, especially with Three Dog on the radio constantly extolling your virtues (or condemning your atrocities as the case may be), but you sometimes forget what it's like for all the other people just struggling to survive all the messes you leave behind as you do what you need to do.

It's nice to get a glimpse into that.

Well then. Now onto what I was going to say. This jerk enjoys making cliffhangers! I HATE YOU NEMO! XD

Way to end on a cliffhanger. Only a few stories on here so far have gone the "evil Vaultie" route, I find it very interesting. Your main character has a great sense of humor, btw.