If you're having trouble figuring out where to put a paragraph break, you should look into getting a beta reader. It's always a good idea to run your work by someone else before publishing it; then, if you have any issues, you can ask them for help and get it smoothed out.

This story desperately needs them, as you might be able to tell; it's difficult to read through because of the large amount of text all globbed together. Once you have a beta reader and can have them help you fix things like that, your writing will improve.

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