This is very good! I don't really get Alice though... And Jasper... Is he the Twilight Jasper- and... OMG IS THIS LIKE THE BEGINNING OF THE PEOPLE FROM TWILIGHT?!?
Wow...

great story :)

Your stories are pretty cool..heheheh..i would LOVE if you continue with them:)

okay, so i just read some of both of these authors stories, and i'm a fan. especially stenemichele. her work is amazing- mark my words, she'll be the next j.k. rowling. i love her work and there is no way she's fifteen. i am so jealous. go check out her stories! they're great!
and this story is cool, too.

Hm...Wonder if i need an account to review..let's see...

It's really good, very descriptive. I'd love to hear some more of James's thoughts/backstory, and I think some more of the Aliceness that we know and love could filter through. But really, good job! Keep writing!

I really LOVE this! And I don't use the term 'love' lightly! It's amazing and I agree with GinaN.B. that you can't tell who wrote what. I can recognize some of SteneMichele's style from her other works (she has very flowing, poetic writing) and I can recognize some of randomuser's writing (she is very to-the-point and doesn't sugar coat things) and they both blend so perfectly! I love it and am eagerly awaiting an update. Keep writing! Brilliant!

I really like this story. It is amazing and really good. Keep writing and dont give up

This is fantastic.
Each character has been captured so well, and the writing style is perfect.
I can't believe this is being written by two separate people (you both rock! btw), because your two stlye blend together flawlessly, It would be impossible to tell where one writer ends and another takes over.
Gina
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This is so well written, you describe everything really well so I got a really good picture of everything you were writing about.
I'll definatley be reading more of this.
Well Done
Gina
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"But like I said before- I am strong. Humans have no control over me. It is my sole purpose in life to control the human population, and the captivating blue eyes of some little girl was certainly not going to stop me from performing my duties. Call me sadistic or bellicose; I do not care."
that's an amazing paragraph! you've captured james so well.
I read this story on stenemichele's page too and it's great! how did you guys write this? normally co-authorships are weird because you can tell when one person stops writing and another picks up, but you guys did it perfectly. I can't figure out who wrote what. It's perfect! Also, randomuser, I think you should definitely try some more of this romance/drama genre. Your humors are cute but if you wrote some of this then you should write more of this kind of thing. you guys are both so talented!

Great story! can you review mine too