Very nice :3 I love that Suigetsu continues to get all of the sayings wrong-- that seems like him to me.
Suigetsu seemed very Suigetsu-like, but I think Sasuke seemed a little out of character. But I can relate, because I have such a hard time getting a story/plot to go anywhere when he's so emotionless and stony D: Blargh
My only advice on your writing is this: when you address a character, I think it sounds better to either write their name or "him/her/she/he etc," rather than phrases like "raven-haired boy" or "yellow-haired teen" (I know you didn't use these phrases, just examples, you know). Using a subtitute gets noticed more than their actual name, but it doesn't really make the story any better, in my opnion. Your readers won't notice much if you just address the characters by their names, and it will make the story flow better, and readers like me cringe less :''D
Otherwise! it was fabulous! I like when Sasuke's being less careful when he comes through the bushes-- it really lets you see how flustered he is. I love this pairing-- something about the two of them together is adorable <3

I like it very much... I believe you managed to keep Sasuke pretty much in character, and the interaction between him and Suigetsu is both credible and cute -- the perfect combination. ^_~ The way Suigetsu kept getting the sayings wrong and Sasuke kept correcting him was so amusing and gave the story unity... plus, I loved Suigetsu's reflexions on Sasuke in the early paragraphs. Good one! ^_^

:D this turned out really well. i love it. especially the ending.

OMFG! This is so cute! I highly suggest writing more to this story (hopefully with a happy ending), or at least other one shots like it. There isn't eough SuiSasu to go around...

I dunno Suigetsu's character very well either. All I can guess is that he likes fighting. And swords. Blah.

And I liked ,this story very much

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Karin fluttered around their leader, asking if she could do anything to “ease his pain”.
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Haha! More like she caused his migrain. Anyway...

YAY! A Hebi story from you!! :D :D Hehehe. I really enjoyed it! Especially all the playing on words. "Water follows fire." "Eye in the storm." Nice. And the end was cute!! :)

You should soo write another one!! :D

~Selena

P.S. OMG, he so IS a man-**, no kidding. :P LOl. :)