|Reviews for Fear Abroad|
| So this is real life 2/9/09 . chapter 3
Good concept and your writing is okay, but it would be better to work in information more casually rather than just stating it like in the first chapter. For example, it was nice how you worked in the robe colors by having Meaghan envy the older students.
| Me 1/29/09 . chapter 2
your characters should have some talents otherwise they'll be boring as long as they aren't stunningly beautiful, top of every class, popular... etc then they aren't mary-sues
if you try too hard you'll end up with an anti-sue which is this:
Some authors make an extreme effort to avoid making their character into a "Mary Sue". The results of such attempts are sometimes referred to as "Anti-Sues". Given that the key difference between a well-developed, sympathetic character and a "Mary Sue" is often considered to be a lack of realistic faults, this generally involves making such characters extremely flawed. Some such attempts are seen as creating interesting, three-dimensional characters - though others are seen as being similarly over-the-top as the more stereotypical "Mary Sue".
"Anti-Sue" traits include physical unattractiveness, mental illness (including sociopathy and psychopathy), noticeably lacking in power or competency relative to other characters, being generally disliked by others or never interacting with them, cowardice, and other unflattering characteristics. While characters who can arguably be described as "Anti-Sues" have proved popular in some fiction, especially in modern times (see anti-hero), at other times they may be perceived to be as bad as or even worse than "Mary Sues" for their cliché nature or lack of sympathetic traits. "Anti-Sue" is viewed as merely another cliché stock character, or even simply an anti-hero variation of the "Sue" - especially if he or she still manages to take the spotlight away from the canon heroes.
I think the characters should be at least good at something. As long as they don't all end up on the student council or whatever, I think they'll be fine. Everybody is good at something.
| Aspieturtle 1/29/09 . chapter 2
A good beginning, although you were right about chapter 1 - it didn't read fluently. It was good to meet the kids and I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
| Miyako Suou 1/28/09 . chapter 1
Interesting concept. I'm interested, since I am also Canadian. So where is the school? Just wondering what part of Canada it's in, since it's so big. Keep writing!