177 excellent words.Amazing how you are able to express and tell so much in so little words.

This is so sad, but pleasantly ironic because of what her love does do. Just so you know, you have the main characters tagged as Harry and "Lily Luna Potter," who is actually Harry's daughter... so you might want to change that one. :)

I guess, when you think about it... loving *anyone* during a war is dangerous, but having children...

The title is brilliant, a really apt play on words... I loved it as much as the story... yay!

Simply gorgeous. A beautiful, intense portrait of motherhood in the midst of war; you packed so much into this vignette. I love the "costly safety of Harry's midnight-shrouded nursery," and the "arrogance" of living through the daytime pretending they are invincible, only to be humbled by the "gentle, delicate dark." So lovely.

It's especially poignant that we, the readers, understand the power of her love more fully than she did. She wasn't safe, and she wasn't fearless, and she never saw the wonders her love worked -- she died without knowing that she'd saved her son, who inherited her capacity for selfless giving despite all odds; she didn't know she'd saved her old, misguided friend, who transferred his bitterness and brilliant talent to the right side of the ongoing battle; and she never saw the thirteen years of peace she bought the world. It's very moving to see her uncertainty, and to know that, in spite of it all, she never surrendered to despair.

Thanks so much for writing!

Hey,
That was incredibly deep and beautiful. Keep writing! I don't have any criticism for you, so well done!
ranDUMM

Aw! Poor Lily! I wonder if every mother feels that way...is there love EVER enough to protect their innocent children? In Lily's case, her worries are for naught and it is enough. For such a short fic it does do "wonders" with Lily's character. Excellent job!

Ooh, that was beautiful. I loved that in the light they could pretend it was okay, and how the dark makes her see clearly their mistake. Beautiful!

Beautiful. Sad and almost haunting but beautiful. I think you capture Lily so well here, the weakness that she has, the fact that she is young and scared and how she loves Harry but at the same time she feels so helpless.