Interesting. I like how you portray the Cullens: as one indivisable family. One strong unit. I loved this oneshot! You should be proud.

you should write another chapter! Most certainly you should! please! lol very good though!

aw!! thats amazing!! so cute, and...I can't think of a word.

but so cute!!

Poor Alice :(! I love how you right a sensitive side to Alice. Because in the books we always see a hyper, fun loving side of her, but there's obviously a more calm side, and you right it well.
Feel really sorry for Jasper in this story too :(!

Beautiful.

But.

Could you write more? Could you write either the story of Mary Alice's life or a series of oneshots from her perspective. You know, like the time when she said it would rain tomorrow. And then a moment in the attic when she can hear her father praying. Dinner time. I read somewhere a quote "... and then you start longing for your dinner. That's when you know you're a prisoner."

Anyway, got to go. Please think about it. I'm putting this on story alerts, just in case!
TSG

Brilliant! Better than your other - Gemstones. Going straight on my favourites list

really great job!

i loved this and think that you should write more on this story, but if you don't want to, that's okay, it was a great story and i really enjoyed it!

Wonderful, beautiful, amazing story.
You're a truly talented writer.