That was really beautiful.

This is intensely beautiful, and tragic, and amazing. So well done...it's incredible.

Chilling and beautiful.

Wow!

How cute!

Very nicely done!

i got one word for you... SEQUEL!

Beautiful. Absolutely positively beautiful. I loved this!)

I really like this story! I would be very very happy to see you write another chapter!

wow that was intense!

beautiful story

ud soon. loved it

Wow, this story was... just amazing. Very well written, powerful.
The only thing I "hate" it's that being a OneShot there won't be more!

great one! the descriptions were excellent

amazing, simply amazing, this is really powerful to me, it almost made me cry, your a wonderful writer

zomg, you have to continue.

won't you? pwease

that was surprisingly intense and well written, I enjoyed the abstract element it had to it. I checked out your profile, I'm surprised you're sixteen so even more props to you because it has a lot of emotional weight to it and I think you understand the character well.

That was tragic and beautiful and just overall very well written. You do a great job of capturing their voices and writing them in character.