You're not going to continue? Oh well.(

aren't you going to continue?(

I love it! Please continue, I also want Gon to have an OC too... Onegai!

nice update soon!

THis is good, but how does Sani fall in love with Killua? Make the love story progress soon. I want to know how Killua will react to the knowledge that Sani is targeting him.

I'm looking forward for the other chapters.
nice. you've given someone's point of view during the hunter exam. though i think you cut and changed some of it. well, of course! this is your story! hehe. well, i like killua a lot. you are good! thumbs up!

i like it! i will be waiting for more chapters )

You could use some more setting description. There were parts where I had to rely on memory of the canon's dialogue to recall what the surroundings looked like and where they were. The dialogue had similarities to the canon, so it was better than nothing, but it's bad practise to ignore these things.

Beside that, I'm questioning how... substantial the reasoning behind an assassin targeting hunters is, and if the plot will carry my interest that far. I'm under the impression that her father is a bigoted fool, and the anti-hero shows no signs of doubt/regret at all... Plus, it is mentioned in this chapter that the Zaoldyecks were a stronger family than Sani's, so if her family is smart then why is her father risking the wrath of them? Even if Killua did run away, he is still an important member of the family, and I doubt they'll just say "Oh well. Our son is dead. Such a shame." It's just suspicious, that's all. Sani's dad must be senile or something. Thought I'd note it. I realize however that we're only in the first chapter, so who knows what kind of explanation you have in store, and what kind of person our anti-hero really is.

Circumstances surrounding Sani seem to be favouring her, and she's not worried at all. Even when she was being briefed on her mission, it looked more like disbelief than anything. I would assume that a dangerous mission would incur at least deeper thought or something. It seems, to me, to be a bit unbelievable. According to the information we've been given so far, Sani's tough, but not tough enough to defeat Killua Zaoldyeck. Considering she's becoming what her family's been opposing fervently for an indefinitely marked time, I expected some other reaction or inner thought than what we received. But after an initial refusal, she just goes on to do it without any qualms or retrospective thinking on the consequences (or perhaps the savage hypocrisy) in her actions. Then again, most of this chapter is dialogue... so I guess I'm expecting too much.

Those are the worries I've just delved into, but I didn't write that to make you feel bad or anything. Far from it, I'm interested in this story! You could take this story places! I wonder if she'll learn to change her mind about Hunters? Will she choose to stop killing indiscriminately and claim some freedom, like Killua? Between which characters does romance spring up? How will Sani avoid Killua's dangerously overprotective older brother? These questions will probably drive me to reading the next chapter, which you hopefully will still post if I haven't offended you... Sorry, but my mind was set on constructive criticism instead of the same mindless praise...

Thanks for the chapter. It was interesting, and I sincerely hope to read more./WorryWartWorth\\

wa! too short yet kawai _

could u write one for kurapika?

so nice,arigatoo