GAH! I just saw a blue swirly thing! HELP ME! *pulls out A-K 47 and starts shooting*
THAT STORY ROCKED! But I didn't understand why he broke the pokemon game. Did it help? OH WHO CARES! THAT STORY ROCKED!

Whoa... now that's got me thinking. It's also got me wanting to re-read Pokemon Revolution... O_o;; Anywho, yeah, this was kind'a creepy. Definately not what I was expecting, but a nice surprise. Great show of emotion on the kid's behalf.

Just flakking insane! I loved it and know a few people who would get a kick out of this awesome work.

COL! Have ya ever read Pokemon Revolution by Farla? You might like it...

really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really scary

*looks around rapidly for blue swirly-things, getting a mouthful of hair in her mouth* Ooh, mesa liked! Kinda reminded me of Animorphs. Your writing needs a tad bit of work *I noticed a few errors here and there* but the overall idea was excellent. I commend you on a job well done! *continues looking around, noticing something* Hah! *throws hairbrush at blue swirl* *realizes it's her shirt* ^_^;

Very, very cool! An original and well-managed take on the crossover theme. Well done.

0.0 that was really wierd and abstract, yes, but I like abstract. that was a very intresting notion...goood work!

BWHAHAHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA! Try to capture Pokemon and this happens to ya! OK, nobody had the CHANCE to catch them... Who cares? Ah, such wonderful dark stuff...

This is really good; the portal thing may be a bit cliche, but the dark twist on pokemon and the emotions definately make up for it, they're just great. The tortured boy brought to want his own death..I love it. ^_^ And the last words of the boy were so powerful..great job!

Hmm good point

Ohhhhh..spooky. I love the way it ends, like a cliffhanger never to be finished thing. You could make a series out of it. Overall, it was really good!

scicide is the final act of the coward.
ok, that by far was the MOST creepy, nasty, there is no god, give me nightmares pokemon story I've EVER read.

This is very good. And scary. It's going strait to my favorites when they come back.