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Kirsten Erin
2009-11-02 . chapter 9
Yeah, I could definitely see Wally wondering why he enjoyed horror movies now that he was practically in one. Great chapter!
I hope Wally and Vandal get out okay! Jake too! :D
Kyer
2009-10-31 . chapter 9
I keep expecting normal Supes to swoop in on account he surely couldn't have been eaten...too ** zombie toothies.

This is why characters should listen to me when I scream at them. DON'T GO OUT THERE WITH A DARKENING SKY, YOU NITS! GO OUT ON A CLEAR DAY!
Churnok
2009-10-31 . chapter 9
Sorry if I'm one of the reviewers that has disappeared on you. I've been busy with a few things of my own.
", as if it became too dark," This wording feels off to me. I'd change the first comma to a period and remove the as.
"“Besides, without your blood, I can’t even begin construct the cure.” As he spoke, Savage tugged me around the final corner. “Besides, we’re nearly there." Having besides twice in the same paragraph is repetitive. It's believable dialogue, but from a writer's standpoint it could be rewritten. Those were the only problems that stood out to me. Though we could use a reminder as to what kind of dog Jake is. I forget offhand if that ever was mentioned.
Clearly a rocky relationship between Flash and Vandal, but that's to be expected. The image of Vandal lugging around a purse, despite the practicality, was rather amusing. Was it empty when he found it or did it still have the contents of the previous owner? If it did still have the original contents, several ideas come to mind ranging from Vandal making a derogatory comment, to him pulling out some of the embroidery stuff and either actually doing embroidery, or putting it to some other use.
Interesting to see Vandal coming to Flash's rescue. Probably going to irk the speedster if he gets time to think about it. Which brings me to several points in this chapter that seem to be hints that he might be getting his speed back. Are these just a tease or a sign of his powers actually coming back?
A good addition with the expectant cliffhanger for this story. I hope to see more soon.
Runner
2009-10-31 . chapter 9
Nice Chapter, kinda creepy and well written...tension all over! cant wait to read the next one,so keep on updating!
Nightwatcher'sunknowngirl
2009-10-31 . chapter 9
That was so EXCITING! Makes a great chill for Halloween...*mysterious music plays in back* Anyway, poor Wally. He seems to be in a mess with Savage(He always stuck me a more of a Savage guy then Vandell) and Jake. How is he going to get out of this, I wonder? Huggles Wally. *gives Wally a big hug* This is really, really AWESOME...:)
Thanks for the awesome read and please update soon, :)
Watcher
Kirsten Erin
2009-10-19 . chapter 8
Yay! Vandal's going to help him save the world.
I'm assuming the others that Barry is talking about are the remainders of the JLU. Yikes!
Update soon!
Kyer
2009-08-02 . chapter 8
I really have to check the xovers better. -sighs-

The dream Barry said something ominous...where ARE the infected superheroes?
Churnok
2009-07-31 . chapter 8
"he wasn’t about to see me crying or something." the or something feels taked on to me and could be removed.
"turned to blackened piles of ashes and wither away." Tense error here. change wither to withered in order to fix it.
No other problems that I noticed.
“How do you know that I’m not looking for a new best friend?”" Vandal can have such an interesting sense of humor. You would think he would try a bit harder to get on Wally's good side. True, he probably sees his way as the only viable option, but he was a skilled manipulator back when there was still civilization so he would know the value of convincing someone else. Guess the time spent alone corroded those skills considerably.
"“Seeing as I am immortal, my skin is tough enough to keep me from coming down with the undead sickness. I assume that if one of the creatures took a big chunk out of me, the bite would reverse this. But for obvious reasons, I’m not going to attempt this experiment.”" Personally, I would have thought Vandal's immortality would make him immune even if the creatures used him as a chew toy. Is this a bit of foreshadowing? Either theory would be rather foolish for him to test of course, but it would be interesting to see which is proven. Seeing Jake save Savage from such a fate would be interesting too.
West and Savage are going to form an interesting and strained partnership. Should be sadistically entertaining.
Jovianokamigirl
2009-07-31 . chapter 8
There gotten to be a other reason for Vandal helping Wally. I don't he doing this out of the kindness out of his heart. But I hope Wally dose see that and try to come out with a cure himself.
Flightgirl
2009-07-31 . chapter 8
haha, i love that last line! "If the zombies didn't kill me, then Vandal Savage's extreme case of arrogance would." HAHAHA!

So Vandal has a plan to save the world, huh? well, i certainly hope so!

i have a question, but i don't necessarily expect a straight answer. is the Justice League infected? i've wondered since the beginning. i mean, where he never found the bodies...It's be much happier in the end if Wally manages to change everyone back and they were there.
Nightwatcher'sunknowngirl
2009-07-31 . chapter 8
OH MY GOSH! You UPDATED! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! *faints*
That was so AWESOME! Vandel is going to drive Wally crazy, am I right? ;) But at least he's not the Joker. ;) That's always a plus.
In Wally's dream, when Uncle Barry was talking, who were 'they' that he was talking about? I wonder...*gulps* Oh man, I can't wait to find out! :D
Please update soon, that wasso EXCITING!
Watcher
Jemand
2009-07-31 . chapter 8
Great story, it's really exciting! Wally and Vandal on their way to CCPD. Can't wait to see what's expecting them. (update plz^^)
I've seen the movie "I Am Legend" and I'm a little bit concerned about the ending. I mean... we all know what happens, right? I hope Wally will surive this.^^ (happy ending!!)
Kirsten Erin
2009-06-29 . chapter 7
Yay! At least there's someone out there, even if it is Vandal Savage. He helped Superman out once, maybe he'll help Wally out of this mess. Though, knowing him, it's his fault in the first place.
Ugh!
Now is where I tell you to UPDATE SOON, PLEASE! :D Can't wait to find out what's in store for the rest of the story.
Kirsten Erin
2009-06-29 . chapter 6
Oh no! I so saw that coming!
And the way Wally found out about Bruce... So sad! It was written very well and very realisticly. Oh, where's my happy ending? It had better be soon!
Kirsten Erin
2009-06-29 . chapter 5
That poor little puppy! I'm glad Fred was sacrificed for him. :P
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