i wish that she wasn't lying.
really like it.

Okay, I really should be studying (I have finals soon. Bleh.), but I wanted to check out some of your other stories.
As for this particular story... I loved it! You made Erik seem more human, I guess, and his complete love for Christine was really intense.
"Perhaps there is another side to Christine..." Hmm, I havdn't really thought about that. There probably is a sort of... not really darker... but less innocent side to her, as you showed here.

another great piece my dear! i like how Christine does have a back bone. Anyway hun i hope everything is going great with you and your family. Hope to hear from ya soon many blessings and take care

Just a little note to let you know I've been without internet since 2am Monday (late Sunday night.) Can't seem to access my DA messages from this computer (work) so gotta tell you this way. (sigh)

The internet cable guy is supposed to come out on Friday (I'm going through withdrawal here! ;D) 'cause we're such a remote, small, isolated location we don't rate same day service. (even bigger sigh)

Barb

Yes, I've always thought Christine was more manipulative than most fics after the original portrayed her. All (?) of the movies and both the musicals have her as this timid little ingenue who quivers and has no choices. But Leroux gave her more than one dimension. She was strong enough to look at Erik without his mask. Why? It's interesting that we both have slightly darker takes on that question.

Thanks for the read!

~ Ava

Very refreshing to read about a manipulative Christine. I'd like to read more!
Laurie

Uh! What? That was it?
I enjoyed it too much for it to be that short.
I would like to read more, please!
~Tadriendra, Lady of Mirkwood

This was really very good! I recently finished reading Susan Kay's retelling, and I loved it, so I'd like to see your retelling. ^_^ Christine and Erik were in perfect character, something I find difficult to do. Please, if you could, post some more excerpts!

I feel so evil because I love his timidity and diffidence so much. I should be happier if he were more daring and confident.

But enough of that...I can bother you with this anyway in an email or so...So forget the first part of this.

I am very happy you published it because I really wanted to read it so badly! I know it would be amazing and it is bodacious!

I love the reference of him following her like a dog and I also very much enjoy the side of Christine you show to us. She seems to enjoy how much power she holds over him, not in an evilish way, but well...I guess it's kind of understandable she does, but she really seems to like it.
She doesn't seem to feel very guilty for lying to him here, but I think from the excerpt alone I can't tell if she doesn't feel guilty or if she is actually angry with him or even fearful so that she feels she needs to do this.

Mominator: Thanks so much!! I can't wait until I have more time to work on the longer work... but I needed to put something out there for feedback. I missed you all too much!!

anonymus: Oh, I have some idea because I was really missing posting and your feedback and all as well. I can't believe how long it's been since I've posted!! How can I stand it?

I'm glad you liked Erik, but I can't even take credit this time. It's another of those "out of the air" inspirations that just hit me. I love those, and Erik always seems sweet and pitiable in those...

You're right about Christine; she should feel a bit guilty, but I think that'll be in the NEXT part perhaps, or maybe not until he releases her and she looks back. I'm not yet certain. I DO love your "revenge" idea for his deceit of her, and though I'm not sure she'll have that in mind when she STARTS lying, she may remind herself of that to assuage her guilt a bit. Excellent, excellent feedback!

I'll try to post something else from the retelling soon. I wish I could post the whole thing! but I'm not writing it in chronological order, so it's all in scraps.

Thanks again! Wonderful to hear from you, also!

You have no idea how happy I was to see that you had posted another story!

I know I've said this so many times before, but it bears repeating: you do such an incredible job of portraying Erik! There are few on this website who can write a good Leroux-based Erik. Most writers tend to leave out the childlike qualities in his nature, but you certainly don't! I think, in the end, that is the part of him that makes the reader pity him.

Your portrayal of Christine was also quite good. A lot of people seem to think of her as an indecisive, flighty person who relies on other people to make decisions for her. I honestly don't believe that was Leroux's intention. To me, she appeared to be someone who could assess a situation and make decisions (even though she didn't always make the right ones, and often she was a bit melodramatic). Here you have shown us a young woman who has found herself in an awkward and frightening situation, and is trying to make the best of it. That is the best way a person can write Christine. However, I do think you might want to balance her cunning and deceit with little bit more guilt. Perhaps it was my translation, or my naivety concerning human nature, but I got the impression that she felt a little remorse about lying to Erik, and that she truly did not want to hurt him.

Then again, perhaps it would be more interesting if you had her resent the fact that he deceived her with that Angel of Music trick and she simply wishes to seek revenge by deceiving him in the worst way possible!

I don't know if any of these suggestions are useful to you, but I hope they help!

It was so wonderful to hear from you again! Please, update this story or post something else really soon; I've missed you and your writing!

This was great! I love the emotions portrayed - the good and the not so admirable. Insight into a character's motivations is always interesting.

I think it would work both as a stand alone AND as part of a larger work.

Barb

Good. Very good. *Sigh* Yes my Leroux itch has been scratched, lol.

This Christine is down right mean! Not spoiled or immature but mean!

Poor Erik!

your vision of Christine is sort of how I see her. I never did think she was quite as innocent as everyone thought. Someone who was truly innocent and not hardened by life would have keeled over from a heart attack or gone insane when seeing Erik for the first time.

Only if he could have won her heart and love by voice alone beforehand would she stood a chance not to scream her head off.

I don't think Christine ever cared for Erik in Leroux's version. She was too concerned with herself, her career and Raoul and in that order.

Glad your keeping your hand in by posting an offering once in a while.