And there was much sadness as the characters all continued to move in their scripted paces... Because that's all that it was, a scripted life. She was losing herself inside the character that she had to portray, and he had never had the chance to find out who he was aside from the expectations of his station.

*Tears galore*

*angst*

And you're right. Something like this had to be written, somewhere, somehow.

Still cuts ya to the quick tho, don't it?

In such a simple, short length, you did a great job showing Lyn’s difficulties as she struggles to take on a different persona that just simply isn’t her. Short but to the point. ^^

Oh my... I really love this story. These little snapshots really do wonders to further develop these characters and their relationship. Your writing is excellent and you handle the characters so well.

Very nice work.

Indeed it had. And it's beautiful. And sad.

You keep using the word cute. Too bad the validity of the word can't be helped...

The reference to "the hill" is the most artistic and perfect image you've made yet, and imagery has been plentiful and powerful in this little series.

I do assume you mean the hill where Lyn looks out at Sacae.

I've read the past few of these, and I personally think that this one flows very well. You might very well consider this a song on a very well done album. Perhaps the song does not by itself flow particularly well, but in the context of the entire album, it does fit. Your concern is misplaced.

D'aww. This was adorable~

Not much I can say on this aside from that--and that I'm sorry for the scarcity of reviews from me.

[Xirysa]

Loving =D All of them. I really liked them.

Aw, Kent and Lyn are really cute together, and as I stated before, you sure know how to write them! I like how capture some simple yet meaningful moments between them that might appear to be nothing at all but help bolyster their feelings in the long run.

Keep up the excellent writing! ^^

(Cute X 10)

I think the above says it all, but yeah, the last line really had me smiling.

[The next morning, though, the first thing she noticed was that his fingers were laced through hers.]

Awesome stuff!

Yep, Rath would definitely be the strongest contestent for Lyn's affections in Kent's POV--poor Kent is going to have a little competition...

'Hate', just like its counterpart 'Love', is an extremely malleable concept from common usage. It can be used however you see fit, diluted to fit the concept, or strengthened to meet the need.

I'm gonna stop there before I end up trying to philosophize beyond my beyond my half-awake brain capacity.

Another good look at character views character, and the reason behind it.

Heehee, I love mind-rotting.

And this line: [All those years of training, he thinks, and not once did they cover how a knight ought to act in the presence of a liege so beautiful.] Now, that's just adorable.

Actually, I think I like this even better: [Her eyes are bright, and she bids him a good morning in the way only Lady Lyndis can, her hair a mess, mid-stretch, mid-yawn.] It's a super-short chapter, but you're STILL going to give Lyn the quirks that makes her a true, three-dimensional character. Lovely.

[He doesn’t need her attention, her kindness, her affection, and the fact that she seems to only bestow it upon him—her ever-faithful, loyal vassal—baffles him] This confused me a little bit...when you call him her "ever-faithful, loyal vassal", you are giving the reader a great reason for why Lyn IS affectionate toward him. But because it's from Kent's point of view and you insert it into a sentence where he's talking about how he doesn't understand, it looks like he's just being modest to the point of absurdity. (Unless you MEANT to have the reader know that he secretly understands why she loves him?)

Why are you so good at these? ;_;
~Kender

Umm. Your author's note is what I wanted to say, so now I can't say it ;_;.

It was still really potent, for being short. Very emotion-packed, in my opinion. I also like how you stylized it, with almost every sentence enough to be its own paragraph.

...Do you know what would have made it better?
Mr. Darcy. ;)

~Kender