You are so dead now. The reades are going to kill you because what you did to Maddie. Hurry up and finish the story before they reach you!

Well, thats a complete case of Moral Event Horizon there, not only did he try to rape Maddie, but he beat her, called a ** and killed her in a painful death leaving her disfigured. It was VERY similar to Mitsuko Souma's death from the manga, flowers were big theme in that section, oh right, and her face was RUINED too (but I do know of course the similarity wasn't planned). Quite a few typos and at one point you made George refer to Maddie as 'him'.

Uhoh, saddest scene coming up! But hey, I did not remember the scene between Lindsay and Danny! I wonder what will happen with those two after this...

Right, so Gabriel (although not a violent character) has been saddled with Rose and Martha, one of whom distrusts him and the other is pretty much kissing the ground he walks on, yet he's (although not officially) plotted their demises, or was at least wary of the difficulty involved.

Lily is hallucinating over George, who hasn't thought of her twice through the whole game. It's starting to sound a bit fatal attraction-ish about now, I'm still not giving up on my 'til death do us part' prediction.

Maddy is now starting to turn to the dark side, thinking ill of those she had killed and considering the possibility of playing to win.

Al and Willie, well, as boring as ever, I hope somebody blasts that piano to bits, now that would spice things up a bit.

Danny and Lindsay, well, she's going to be rattled, he's starting to turn into the 'If I can't have you, nobody can' stalker-trope. Will she make a runner, be his odd crush-slave or kill him outright? Things sure are starting to heat up a bit...

So Lindsay born at Mill Valley, huh? :-D Why I thought it?! Anyway, you did a great job with this profiles, too bad I know what will happen afterwards...

Oh, I'm starting to understand different characters a bit more, but there are some things that confuse me. I don't think you've mentioned George's stature, but I've always pictured him as fairly big and a bit brutish, yet he ways less than Gabriel and is shorter, I've always thought Gabriel was fairly...erm, sylph like perhaps?

You killed Darla...And she burnt alive? That's just cruel. This chapter (suprisingly for you) has ALOT of little typos spread around.

Gabriel - All he's good for is running and hiding and MAYBE defending himself, he would make a bad killer and wouldn't be good in a fight whether it's fire or MELEE, I predict he won't win.

Lily - All her kills are accident related, she seems quite smart via common sense, but is she witty? Can she think on her feet? No, she runs away from her problems, maybe if she wasn't the Queen Bee she could pull a Mitsuko act. She'll definitley not win.

Nick - He killed Mary and betrayed her trust and BOY did he take ages doing it. He's a psycho, he didn't simply kill her, he planned to kill her. He's smooth and calculating but he might be okay in a fight, but if karma exists, he won't win. I feel he could be a possible winner.

Martha - Without Rose she's nothing, she may be smart and know her stuff but a contender she does not make. What will happen when Rose runs away? Martha, maybe in a dramatic twist she could win, but in a fight, she's a goner.

Rose - The tough girl, she's hardcore and everyone knows it so they will not be hesitant to open fire on her. Maybe she could pull it out the bag but I doubt she'll win, you can't muscle yourself ALL the way through this game.

George - He's nasty and brutal but he's not very smart. He's either going to run into Rose, Lily, Nick or Gabriel. I don't think he'll win, he's done too many bad things for luck to be on his side.

Daniel - The boy next door, he's a boy scout at best. We can only see his self survival skills flourish, but I can't imagine him faring well in a fight. I doubt he'll survive.

Lindsay - She's been vindicated by many a student and up until now she's been protected and comforted by Danny Dearest. If he dies, she'll snap. She could have a 'Carrie' moment, she might just win.

Maddie - She's smart, she's smooth, she's calculating and she can defend herself, in anyones eyes she'll be the safest bet for a winner. She has stealth on her side, she may not win a fully fledged fight but those with their backs to her better watch out. Most ideal winner.

Al - Not a winner, enough said.

Willie - Same as above.

Great chapter! I am shocked that a few of my favorites died, but at the same time, holy crap. Only eleven of those ** are left and I have no idea who to root for. I am liking Rose, Martha and Lindsay, of course. I am shocked that it's come down to this last bunch of students and I am sitting at the edge of my seat, wondering who will live ^^

Update ASAP!

I never thought that darla and Bel are going to die like this! I felt so sorry for Darla, she suffered too much! But I'm still waiting for the next!

I know I should be excited about Wille, but now I can just say "Go Gabriel!". I'm so happy because George couldn't catch him! I'm waiting for the next chapter!

I know how Gabriels a real survivor, but compared to other characters, isn't he up on a pedestal? Those beautiful green eyes etc, the envy of many girls bla bla bla, you said the class was normal, not Disney.

The bit where Gabriel clashes with George for a second time was very hard to read, I reccomend reading it through yourself and maybe spacing it out a bit, it was (well in my opinion) over too quick.

On a further note, I had no opinion of Josie's death. I wasn't happy because I didn't like her and I wasn't sad because I liked her, she was just...a walking shell with a cardboard motive.

Although short, I really liked this chapter. And I do hate to say this (because it'll make me sound like a complete **) but I predicted that Josie would be the next one dead. I don't know how, but with her brother dead, it just made her more likely to die. I liked her character a lot and it sucks that she was killed, but I guess she would have had to go sometime. I enjoyed reading how Rose killed Josie and how each student is gradually growing more and more paranoid. I remember you saying that there will be a massacre scene next? Four or five people dead, I think? If so, I cannot wait for it to happen! Update soon :)

This chapter wasn't too shabby. I felt bad for Arnie and Eddie, especially because of after the flashbacks. It was a nice, emotional scene. Especially when first Fran died (something I wasn't expecting at all) and then when Jacob died (since I liked Jacob's character) and I was shocked that it was Lily who killed Jacob! I wonder how Josie's going to react. I hope she doesn't kill off Lily, since I love Lily, but I also love Josie. I hope you update soon. I like how this story is playing out :)

Okey. The scene with Darla and Belinda was good development, I'd say. The black rose thing.. hehe. But Belinda seems a little off to me. shrug. And Arnie with his fireworks? What's going on? Arnold seems a little strange to me, or maybe just sneaky.

I'd been wondering what was happening with Gabriel and Thomas. I think you wrote the scene well enough. I liked the detail about McDonald's. sigh. But anyway, I liked Gabe better, so I'm glad he lived. Ahh. And Jacob is another one who's being a little creepy. I don't know about the twins.. I don't know about the scene with George and Michael, either. .. Haha, I don't like George's weapon, ehh, sounds pretty painful.

And alright. I think George is pretty dangerous. And since he was in the last scene, I can't think of many others. I think Mark was pretty dangerous too, but we can forget about him. Hm. There is Lily also. I know she didn't mean or want to kill Peter, Krissie and Susie, but she did, and she could kill again. And she has two guns, now.

Ivy

Ahh. I liked Mary's scene, I don't know why. The other scenes were interesting, but I just have to read more. ;P Not much to say, here.