|Reviews for The Training: Secret Project|
| AnimeKing1108 2/7/13 . chapter 3
So far, my problem with it is the pacing. It goes too fast and all the students were practically introduced at once. My suggestion would be to introduce them as the Program progressed.
| ZizziHungarian 11/28/12 . chapter 34
Finally I had time to read this. It' s wonderful... and it didn't turn out cheesy as well. I always missed to know what will happen with the survivors of the Programs, but there's nothing much about this in other stories... now you answered my question. Thank you for the experience, it was really nice to be you proof reader and advisor! Keep up the good work!
| Earthdude 11/10/12 . chapter 34
I enjoyed the chapter, especially the posthumous tribute to Al & Willy, two of the fundamentally good people in the training. Also, I understand that the poem was a code for the composition Wily wrote, translated by what Lindsay heard, but I'm somewhat confused by what the actual code was, and what they meant when they talked about asterisks, of which there were, apparently, none present.
Anyway, excellent fic, I'll be sure to check out your others!
| SadMovie23 11/8/12 . chapter 34
So, you are finished. Congratulations. You have proved to have more persistence and writing commitment than the vast maority of ffic writers, myself included. The ending itself was very well done. Unlike most stories, you did not create neither a sense of hope for the future, nor a great tragedy with the winner. Instead, Lindsay's attitudes after "winning" (because you made it very clear that it was all a tragedy, not a victory for anybody) are all very realistic. She still wants to fulfill Willie and Al's wishes, but she knows this isnt going to bring anyone back. This is a great way of ending a br fanfic, much better than making the winner torture and murder the teacher out of revenge, giving the viewer exactly what he wants to read. I even liked Maddie's special mention! I'll be sure to keep reading the next story, and I have a question: will Lindsay or any surviving character appear in it?
| Guest 11/7/12 . chapter 25
Eh, i was rootin for Maddy, Martha, Bel, Hannah, and Rose. Now lily is all i got left ._.
| els1324 11/7/12 . chapter 34
Oh thank you ended it on a potentially happy note! I mean, I didn't expect it to have a very happy ending by any means, but man! You were going dark and...and I didn't want Lindsay to kill herself or just become emotionless and detached from the rest of the world! D:
I remember being really excited when I started reading this, learning who each of the characters were, hoping Lindsay or Al would make it to the end. Aaah, the memories.
| SadMovie23 8/25/12 . chapter 33
Hello, sorry for taking so long to review. I read this chapter many weeks ago but forgot to do it, and since its quite short I thought it wasnt that necessary. Anyway, this is my opinion.
First of all, great job of making a way for Lindsay to defeat the almost invincible George. You managed to pull of what at first I thought was impossible, kudos for that. Still, Im a bit sad that his death was so quick and painless, and not very different from Nick's. As you are certain of, he was the one who deserved to feel pain the most, instead of Al, Maddie or Darla. But well, you cant always have what you wish for. I already explained to you a ton of reasons why I did not like Lindsay to be the winner, but since the last two final options are between her and an (in)complete monster, its more satisfying than george winning, although also more predictable.
The last couple of lines, though? Spot on. You did not characterize lindsays survival as an act of victory and joy, but as it truly is: barbarian and horrible. It makes me excited to see what is she going to do after winning. But i know she wont kill mrs durhamm because you hated the ending of 72 hours.
| ZizziHungarian 8/12/12 . chapter 33
"And then, baby... everything went black." For a moment at the end I felt something like sorry for George. Waiting for the last!
| ba35 8/12/12 . chapter 32
knew a chick would win because it's fanfiction
| els1324 8/11/12 . chapter 33
(Spoiler alert for anyone reading through reviews!)
Did she just cut her fingers off? I can understand her hair ripping from the tension between George's weight and her keeping herself in place, but it'd be more likely that his hands would slip rather than literally rip her fingers out of socket so - did she?! Good lord that would HURT! ...Although, I'm sure it'd be better than falling and breaking a gabazilion bones in your body.
But anyways, YAY! I'm glad she won! I was rooting for her and George pissed me off so I'm glad he died! :D And confused to, he didn't know she had a bullet-proof vest, haha!
I'm very happy you updated, I didn't think you'd abandoned it, just assumed you got busy.
I'm horrible with codes so I'm not even going to attempt a guess, I'll most likely look like a total idiot.
| YukieUtsumiFan 7/23/12 . chapter 32
I'm really depressed becuase I like this story so much and I've been reading it all for months now and its been abandoned. It had so much potential, I cant help but shed a little tear because I enjoyed it so much. :-(
| Satir3 6/16/12 . chapter 31
I'm not too sure I like Lindsay's character. She seems too floozy for anything interesting to come of her. I do like Al's ambition and determination. Unfortunately, this chapter seemed to drag on. There were a few points that I thought were unnecessary, such as mentioning that the water Lindsay found was Rose's old bottle (that has to do with what?) but this was entertaining in the way that I was guessing whether or not Al would escape with Lindsay or ditch her for safety. It was also sort of cheesy how both of them ended up surviving in the end. It seems that this chapter didn't really change the circumstances. There's still three contestants left and only one winner can remain. Now that Lindsay's slept, there's nothing else that can really stand in her way.
| Satir3 6/16/12 . chapter 30
This chapter was okay. Not much going on here. A lot of foreshadowing and suspense to tie us but nothing major. I do feel like Al and Lindsay are the only ones with a chance of winning because George is too obvious a choice to win the title. This chapter sort of drags on but I'll continue. I've come a long way and I don't feel like giving up now.
| Earthdude 2/27/12 . chapter 32
Okay, now Lindsay's gotta win it! Can't wait for the final showown, update soon!
| SadMovie23 2/26/12 . chapter 32
This chapter was entirely different from what I was expecting to read. Atfirst, I even thought u had decided to change the way your story was going all together and rewrote ur draft of this chapter. I don't believe that's the case, thankfully.
Your idea of making Lindsay copy the composition to her notebook was genius. I really mean it. Unpredictable a great anticipated clue thrown in (The mention of her writing in her profile). Now I do believe the plan is going to work, and the teacher probably won't notice it because, as far as I know it, there are no cameras in the island.
Alistair dying... I did not like it as much. I sympathized with the fella, but this wasn't the reason. Without him, there's only Lindsay and George. One is a monster who absolutely can't win if God exists in this world, and the other is a very typical audience surrogate. Someone who was created from the start for you sympathize with because of a sad past. I'm not saying I don't use or like these characters, but they get very, very annoying if used as the main character. Lindsay hasn't reallye done anything so far, and your depictions of her fairyland dreams make her seem really childish and weak. It feels like a very soap opera story, to make the victimized underdog win while RETAINING HER GOODNESS, when a loner who faces death in the battlefield is the most likely to crumble and turn to killing, like Kagura and Sato in my story. If George wins, it will leave a sour taste on my throat, but it will make the game unpredictable and a radical departure from all the other fics. I believe the best option is to make Linday win and give George the worst death (I really don't believe it was Al's, that was painful but not cruel or creative enough), but change Lindsays personality and turn her into a much more cynical, bitter and less sympsthetic creature after going back to her normal life, specially now that her love is dead.
Well that's all. Sorry to be hard. I'm adopting the same way of criticism you use when reviewing Girls Only, from now on.