heres hoping she doesnt say the- OHSNAP! more abiut kiba than i wanted to know... anyway critique... perfect in every way you didnt jump in too fast or start with a back story and speed through it the start was amazing the detail exquisite and the end... d-uuuuuuh... um kiba... no... it was easily the best ive read in a long time if not ever. very good and heres to a succesful career in writing you woulld be great for it

Akamaruuuuuuu! Ahahah. Nice.

Ok that's great. I can't stop laughing. So worried about her leaving he doesn't even realize he called for his dog. :D

LMAO...

I like it. It's well-written.

Om my god what a fail kiba I mean you were worried about her but you ended up calling your DOG how embarrassing

Lmao. Truly funny.

oh shit!:0 hahaha!

OMG! He actually mention who? wah! P

that is hilarious at the end and the rest is awesome

brilliantly written! kudos for creativity! Keep it up!

Okay that was worth waiting for the end! Akamaru - never expected that, but I probably should have,huh?

oh, poor kiba.

First:

Well written, in depth and intricate.

Grammar is good and Wording is fantastic.

Second:

HILARIOUS!

KUDOS! Overall, baby, you have one very god Lemon right here. I love it. Akamaru...

Hahaha... That was unexpected. Having read the summary, I'd expected Naruto to be called out, along with another girl, but I couldn't decide whom it would be. I was wrong on both counts, but the end was certainly more interesting for it. XD

OMG, brilliant! _