Wonderfully painted picture of anguish. Love it when people take advantage of certain liberties poetry grants in terms of the use of language. "Fornever yours" - absolutely amazing wording; get a strange feeling of fear in the pit of my stomach when I look at it. Means, you've made an impact on at least one reader, which is what the author aims at, doesn't he/she?

The only thing that felt out of place were the words in brackets. Mind you, it's a personal thing - I'm all for the fluency and rhythmical (not exactly rhyming but more like alliteration/assonance, repetition of words/phrases etc.) flow of the language when it comes to poetry, so those interjections were a bit disrupting.

Otherwise, it's a lovely piece of writing. Thanks for sharing!

That was great!

Ooh! I like it :) Very artistic, very Draco ^_^ Anyone who didn't get is silly and daft lol!

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when i first started i was like 'could it be neville?'
but then i got suspicious about draco
and the blonde hair part confirmed it!

this is actually really sad! but touching - the malfoys are not as *hard-core* as we think!