Hold on... *concentrates very deeply
Okay. So you said two daughters. Ashley, Elizabeth, and Sarah... Unless Sarah's a nickname...
Anyway, that was really cute, and I wish that the show had ended up like that! :D

As a new Sanctuary viewer (it's only just started airing where I live) I'm finding the Helen/John relationship really interesting.

This looks like a promising start and I guess, like all stories, there are a multitude of directions in which you could take it. I hope you write more 'cause I'd be interested to read more.

You mention it was quickly written and unbetaed and it would read more easily with a good tidy up the verb tense is a little confusing in some places but I think that's something many of us have problems with!