 VirendraLione 2009-06-29 . chapter 1It was readable, which is always a bonus. However, I found it a bit cliche'd...I'm not an expert on domestic violence and it's subsequent effect on any children present but this scenario, as an explanation to a character's present disposition is all too often used. I'd be interested in reading any continuance of this story, you may decide to write, though. I particularly liked the reference to the movie in the word '**MOOK' as it strikes me as something a scared innocent child would probably make up on the spot, trying to make him/herself sound big and aggresive. Overall, it was well written. Good work! Hope I helped. :) |