This was really good. Surreal, odd, and funny.

(Long whistle.)

Just finished reading this and it is a STUNNER. I've never read a story like it in fanfiction. It manages to be dreamlike, surreal, sexy in places and funny in heaps others. It's so beautifully strange and I love it.

Favourite parts: I think their face melts off...Maybe they get deported?... Or do I just eat them alive?...Ah, it's been so long I couldn't say..." I fell off my chair laughing.

and the part where Bubbles whispers Him's name in his ear. Delightfully sexy, something that's usually either done corny, stupid or porny. This is delivered perfectly.

Few critisms, you misspelled a few words and there were some typos and in some places it was confusing...but it didn't ruin your story and it's still a beautiful piece of fiction! One of the best Hibbles story and a gem in this fandom! Great job and keep it up!

Ahh, wow. Truly. Just...wow.

Firstly, I'm amazed by how well you do Him's dialogue. It seems incredibly believable! There's a particular richness of the characters you brought out wonderfully. I'm serious. You know, it's difficult to find a good fic with a Puff pairing (all the bad fics I've come across really have given me doubts of the fandom) but this is so..refreshing!

I'm eating this story up. Once I start reading, I can't stop. That's a great achievement as an author. And Him watching Sex and the City is perfect.

I have one more chapter to go, so expect another review for it soon. :)

Oh my... And I thought I gave Bubbles a job as Mommy...

I didn't quite understand the first part- What happened to the monster? Did we flip through time at some point? Or are they just playing tag while they get to it? Maybe I'm just numb, but I feel like I missed something, and I read through the part a couple of times just in case I skipped a line, but I'm still a little lost.

You asked me to review your story since I am one of the mods for a himxBubbles c2. I'm not really into that pairing at all, seeing as to me it just isnt natural. However I wont judge the pairing, if the story is good enough to make the pairing seem good to me. And this wasnt too bad, so good job. You seem to truly capture the idea of him and bubbles.

Good luck writing the next story.

Oh. My. Goodness.

Devil babies! :O I'm wondering how Him got those. Since he isn't human, there are a number of ways it could have happened, right? They could have spawned at will, or he could have produced them asexually. But in such a short amount of time? If it was anything normal Bubbles would have noticed that he had a belly full of babies, and I doubt he'd want to do something like that to his figure. xD;

I really don't think he would cheat on Bubbles, as strange as I've just realized that sounds, so I don't think someone else had them.

Littlest babies! I want to see Bubbles' reaction in the next chapter. :3

Um. Sequel?

I'm kind of speechless, truthfully--that ending is making me yell WTF--but in a good way! I want to know more! I like how the more you revealed to the readers throughout the story, the more you left us wondering. And you held true to that to the very end. :)

Hahaha, at the end I was almost expecting Him to close the book and go "This man's a genius" like in Third Rock From the Sun. Excellent choice :D

The ending was great :) Definitely sets itself up well for a continuation if one was ever attempted. Also the scene with Joseph was cute, as was the end of the initial scene. Growing but not really growing up it would seem.

Also Hank makes his heroic and enigmatic cameo :D I loved it.

You're a great writer and story teller. Keep up the great work.

Here's your next billion dollar story... j/k

Bittercup
"When The Professor successfully creates a forth perfect little girl, Buttercup believes Professor and her sisters are trying to replace her. When Him captures Buttercup after she runs away from home, let the brainwashing begins! (EVIL LAUGHING)

Sorry it took me so long to read this, I fail. :(

One thing that is certainly the opposite of fail, though, is this chapter. Brilliant stuff as always. I like how the reader never quite knows what Him or even Bubbles will do. Although I was pretty sure that Bubbles wasn't going to return to her sisters.

And I must say, knowing what you made Him's real name has made me very giddy. XD The thought of Bubbles whispering it in his ear is quite sexy... that might be because of my crush on the real general, I don't know, but still. :)

Looking forward to the epilogue! Hopefully I'll read it sooner than I read this chapter. ^^;

I love how abstract alot of this is. The only thing I'd suggest is scanning over it once or twice for typos. Like in the last part, you wrote "I'm sacred but.. I'm not... scared of this, what comes next, anymore..." and (If I'm wrong, just let me know) I think that first one was supposed to be "scared". Anyway, good job all over. I liked the more philosphical side of Him, that doesn't get used enough. I think I've only seen it in fanfiction one other time. So kudos.

Fabulous. This story has a wonderful flow and unusual charm to it.

Sorry for taking so long to review, I just had to re-read this chapter to really take it all in. Him's waxing of the philosophical was a bit deeper this time, less laced with lunacy.

The last scene held a certain intensity to it that I just can't place my finger on. I'm not saying I didn't like it, it just has me perplexed. I keep reading and rereading. I've got, physically, what's happening. Emotionally it's deeper than just a simple question.

"What's it like to fall?" Intentional or not, the line has a huge impact, particularly coming from her as she's crying. For some reason it seems even heavier considering one of the origin stories of the Devil. Paradise Lost and all that good jumbo.

And taking into account the inexplicable symbiosis between the two, the line just becomes that much heavier. Perhaps I'm overthinking it, but that could easily be the most important line in the story.

Then there's the ending. That really sticks in my mind. The description is very light, the setting is very vague, but it somehow manages to add to it, rather than take away.

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"I'm sacred but.. I'm not... scared of this, what comes next, anymore..."

"You should be, you know..." Him said, his demonic voice taking on an odd richness at a whisper.

An umbrella appeared with a puff of soundless smoke over her head, it's red fabric trimmed with black lace.

"Are you?" Bubbles asked, already half asleep where she stood, her face half buried into the wet fur of Hims' collar, already long dotted with dripping make up.

"Me? Frightened? ..Me?" The lone voice asked no one.

His voice was a soft warmth as it teleported away, slipping into the witching hour.

"Damn it all to Hell..."
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That conversation, very short, but very heavy. Particularly Him's last line. It captures the certain...inescapibility of the situation.

You said there was still an epilogue to come? Bring it on as fast as you're comfortable. This needs some closure...though in a morbid sense the last scene would suit as a final scene.

wow that was cool, you have to update soon, I'm dying to know what happens!

this was amazing. I'm speechless. I loved it.

:-)