 cyberimp6 2009-02-03 . chapter 1The first half is a bit derivative. (I humbly submit "Legend of the Beginning" as a better way to handle it.) But the line "Obviously you haven't seen her angry." is hilarious! And the re-appearance of Sakuya is pretty clever. I would end it with her saying something like "I just know we're going to be great friends.", and Akiro getting a strnge feeling of familiarity. |