CUTECUTECUTECUTECUTECUTE oh lordy lord that was absolutely adorable and i lovedlovedloved it. GOOD GOD. i love you. i love this story. like i said, adorable. ohkay bye :)

short (maybe too short) and sweet. that was a great story and i encourange u to write more youve got talent not many people i know have that! keep rwiting and i will keep respondine





PKSTARSTORM

P.S. keep writing this one too!

Cute.

Pretty cute. Didn't notice any major errors or anything.

One thing that did strike me though was the whole feel of it. Not the "romantic" feel, but this seems like it's the introductory chapter to a longer novel. I know this is supposed to be a one-shot, but... it just feels like you should do something with it. Just a suggestion, though. :P

-WZ

i liked it!
a little misplelling errors, but i enjoyed it!
good job!