you did a good job on this story... i love it...

Your writing is amazing!

I'm not sure I like the second person point of view... however I like the emotion in his thoughts. Where are you going from here?

Youch, that was kind of depressing.

This is great! Lines I love"Drinking isn’t your release, it’s just momentary solace."There can only be release". Wow.

Very interesting...

They're together but they're not...

I love that Emily makes the first move)