|Reviews for The Seed Shrouded By Night|
| Mikiko97 4/24/10 . chapter 27
I was never a fan of soap operas but...
THERE'S SO MUCH DRAMA IN THIS CHAPTER IT'S BY FAR THE BEST THAT I'VE READ!
No, like seriously, it is.
I wasn't really suprised when they didn't ake up because if they did, it would be too short of a soap opera.
If they DIDN'T... then there'd be MORE drama!
So yeah, this chapter is awesome!
I actually like it better than the first...
though one thing... the slap was coming obvious. You would've totally expected it.
| Amy 4/23/10 . chapter 27
WOW! That was so good! This chapter tugged at my heartstrings and i wanted to cry! NO! WHY WOULD YOU DO THAT TOSHIRO? POOR ARIA!
Keep the good work up!
| Minnie 4/23/10 . chapter 27
Out of all the Hitsugaya fanfics in the web, yours is without a doubt the best. For one thing, im soo glad you don't make the characters fall madly in love with each other from the start. The way you use events to bring them closer is awesome. Not only do we get an in depth profile of the characters, there's also lots of cute and fluffy scenes. Everytime you write, I can literally feel Aria's emotions. When you wrote this chapter, my heart was like 'noo!'. This story is awesome!
Please update soon.
One of your numerous fans.
| Julie013 4/22/10 . chapter 27
I almost cried during this chapter when Toshiro called her a monster...
And... I only saw two mistakes:
"The lieutenant stared at her captain in shock. Tōshirō's eyebrows twitched as he pushed his face over his face." That last part... "as he pushed his face over his face"
"Something useful Rangiku learned over the years was [when] that a person smiled truthfully the edges of their eyes would crease."
| flamesandblackroses 4/22/10 . chapter 27
This was awesome! I almost died when Aria slapped Hitsuguya and the suspense is killing me!
| hitherelovely 4/21/10 . chapter 27
OH MY GOSH! I CAN'T BELIEVE YOU!
GR...U BETTA, BETTA UPDATE SOON!
| HitsugayaDream 4/20/10 . chapter 27
I almost stopped reading after he called her a monster. I wasn't sure I wanted to read what would happen next...But I did. And now I ask you UPDATE SOONER PRETTY PLEASE!
| Bleachluver101 4/20/10 . chapter 25
that was amazing...i wanna cry now...AND RUKIA WULD HAV BEEN PROUD!
it waz just about as gud (and as cheesy) as wen rukia was lecturing ichigo about his inner hollow.
ANYWAYS AWESOME JOB AND UPDATE SON!
| Rika-chi 4/20/10 . chapter 27
Okay... first of all, I think I'll support Aria in this case. Toshirou is just too stubborn for his own good.
Overall, I loved the chapter.
And I might as well rant about the weather... IT IS TOO COLD, two days ago it was burning and suddenly this afternoon it suddenly sarted hailing! And now it's FREEZING!
Good luck and plz update soon
| gallowsCalibrator92 4/20/10 . chapter 27
holy snappers...just wow. I was not expecting that at all. Is Aria gonna go to 'that man?' Is he evil? Is she gonna fight against the Shinigami? God, that would be awesome! Well, since I wasn't expecting them to fight more, I guess I will constantly surprised. I love it! ) Update soon please!
| Writers Unknown 4/20/10 . chapter 27
Wow, I think thats the best I can say. Im lost for words! I love a good fighting scene. But this one... wow I could see it happening in my mind like a TV show! Its an amazing story! You probily get that alot though!
Update Soon! 3
| Ray-nee-chan 4/20/10 . chapter 27
wow dis ws a gd chappy! ii loove it keep it up and update soon!
| Lord Slayer 4/20/10 . chapter 27
Are you sure you aren't being sadisitc? I mean, reeally sure?
Good chapter. I like how it was drom Rangiku's perspective. Kozume and Sawhata are a lot like Sentaro and Kiyone, aren't they? Just a bit more physical about it.
I have a *few* things to point out. Only a couple errors, the others are suggestions for improvement.
First line: Someone who calls is called a gossip, not gossiper.
Line above funny first all italisized line: I'd go with "And replaced it with a sigh." instead.
"And just as quickly as it had appeared, it disappeared. The angry sensation petered out, only to be replaced by a…sad one?"
I'd replace "disappeared" with "it was gone," and instead of "a...sad one?" try "...sadness?"
"Something useful Rangiku learned over the years was that a person smiled truthfully the edges of their eyes would crease."
I'd leave out "useful," and you forgot "when" in between "that" and "a"
"I don't think it's bad if you tell me, eh?" Kind of a weird sentence...
"And then she said 'nothing between me and that man'. Did she miss some words or something? No… Maybe…" Miss some words? Huh?
You keep saying "lately" but hasn't this just started today? Lately suggests that more time than a day has passed but is still recent. I'd go with "all day," or "all morning" or something to that effect.
"Right when he was about to open his mouth, however, Kozue suddenly cut in." Don't need "suddenly" and "however" in the same sentence.
The whole dialogue section that leads up to Takumi getting kneed between the legs is a little hard to follow.
"The silence was deafening." I like that. Nice turn of phrase.
"...you can't ever stay put in one place let alone follow simple orders,..." Don't need "stay put" and "stay in pne place in the same sentence.
Hope to see more soon. _
| As Darkness Takes Over 4/20/10 . chapter 27
This is definitively a story to always be remembered! Just love it.. I mean who can't.
| Hey 4/20/10 . chapter 27
I would've been surprised as well if they had made up. This way, it's better, and it keeps me reading. I love arguments like these! XDXXDXD keep writing!