Ahhhh! A cliff hanger.

It was really good other wise. Your going to have me up all night making up what comes next. :)

Hi the story is very cool

But you had update this story in the german section XD

*Stiffles laughter* Poor Neelix, that's gotta hurt. You've got to write more on this one! I wanna know Chakotay's last name! This defenetly should have another chapter!

Loved it! Write more!

Cool!

nice.

Re: Wacky paragraphs in dialogue

Ack! It's fixed.

J

I agree with everyone else, sequel! It was amusing (I don't say that often, mind you) and I liked it very much. But you should make the conversations easier to read - you're supposed to make a new paragraph each time another person speaks.